ext_12440 ([identity profile] brooklinegirl.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2003-12-28 11:57 pm (UTC)

Well-written Bob Fraser is such a wonderful thing! I think he is an under-used character in fanfic - done well, he is quite the Greek Chorus for the boys.

Loved this:
The other man turned to him, a faint hint of embarrassment on his face, and the expression was so much like Fraser's that Ray couldn't breathe for a second.

Because yeah, you know, at times? Like father, like son, and I just adore that Ray recognizes that, is so struck by that.

Love the desperation here:
"I already lost him, goddammit!" Ray yelled.

"Not yet," the other man said quietly. "Not yet."

And that was just too much--hope--for Ray to fight.


A gleam of hope, for what he fears he has already lost - yeah, I get that, and I love that fear or not, denial or not, Ray just has to know if there really, really is a chance.

(And this is, really, perfection:
Being American is an insufficient excuse for rudeness," the guy said primly, "though it is an explanation of sorts.")

Too amusing!

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