ext_7721 ([identity profile] elmyraemilie.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2004-12-05 06:08 pm (UTC)

Oh, yeah--two wonderful turns on two favorite bits. First:

“Whatsa matter,” I asked him, “you had a preposition?”

Little Miss Homemaker snorted. “More likely a proposition.”

I wasn’t sure if Fraser was playing straight man or if he really thought we’d both gotten it wrong, but at least he looked a little less like he was about to throw up. “If you’re asking if I’ve had a premonition, then the answer is no—just a general sense of foreboding."


A triple Spoonerism. Wow.

And overall, what a terrific take on the "undercover as male dancers" line. Ray in a cowboy costume (or out of one, as the case may be) and Stella in the audience, watching not just Ray, but Fraser, get nekkid in public. Love it!

P.S. You better write more. It's too good to stop here.

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