ext_14605 ([identity profile] laylee.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2005-01-12 01:46 am (UTC)

I really enjoyed that, the little slice of Bob's life on patrol. I love this line in particular:

He thought of Caroline and the boy, surviving another winter in Inuvik.

It's very telling of his relationship with his family, and Ben in particular. Any other father would refer to their son by name, not just as 'the boy'. You've portrayed the distance between father and son with that one line.

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