Guuuuuh. I'm going to try to be coherent, but after that it might not work.
I love it. I love how the situation started out intense, but you just kept building and building until the very end when Fraser's tears were as much of a relief to the reader as they were to Fraser and Frannie. I love Fraser, who often talks to deflect and as a result cope with things, rendered quiet by shock and fear. And I loved Frannie wanting to help and comfort Fraser but not knowing how.
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Guuuuuh. I'm going to try to be coherent, but after that it might not work.
I love it. I love how the situation started out intense, but you just kept building and building until the very end when Fraser's tears were as much of a relief to the reader as they were to Fraser and Frannie. I love Fraser, who often talks to deflect and as a result cope with things, rendered quiet by shock and fear. And I loved Frannie wanting to help and comfort Fraser but not knowing how.
Really nice work.