ext_2084 (
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2005-12-18 04:15 pm (UTC)
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This is wonderful.
Fraser smells smoke. "May I unbutton your shirt?"
Ray glances bashfully here and there before giving a sly wink and saying, "Why not? It's your fantasy."
I really liked this bit - the bashful glance, then the sly wink works so well! You really worked the - doubleness? - to great effect.
I've enjoyed everything you've posted, in fact; sorry not to have commented before now.
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Fraser smells smoke. "May I unbutton your shirt?"
Ray glances bashfully here and there before giving a sly wink and saying, "Why not? It's your fantasy."
I really liked this bit - the bashful glance, then the sly wink works so well! You really worked the - doubleness? - to great effect.
I've enjoyed everything you've posted, in fact; sorry not to have commented before now.