aneli8.livejournal.com ([identity profile] aneli8.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2006-02-10 05:48 am (UTC)

Oh my god, you rock at the WORLD.

It's the last line that did it. Totally. In that way where I read it, and started scrolling, and then read it again, and it HIT me and god, I think that hurt more than it was supposed to, just because it's all subtle and quiet and that's an absolutely beautiful description, god, drying in reverse, jesus.

And Frannie. Oh Frannie. And she's tiny, and *of course* she looks small and not perfect and WELSH, the love for him is so large, and have I made it clear yet how much I love the last line?

You are so talented. I mean, I know this isn't the ultimate showcase of perfection, but it's perfect for what it is, and it's so vivid- I want to... I want to *make* it, I don't know how to say that properly, but I can SEE it, it's RIGHT THERE in my mind, you know?

And it hurts and it's good, and you know how much I fail at words sometimes, but I really, really loved that A LOT.

*fangirls like woah*

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