So, just as I sat down yesterday to write you some feedback, after coming home all drenched from the downpour, LJ went down. So, it's taken me a whole 24 hours to do this. Silly LJ.
But but but! Oh God, I love this so much. I reread it, to refresh it in my head, and it's even better the second time around. I know I've said, MANY times, that I love your Ray, and that hasn't changed a bit. He's Ray, and he's interesting, and insecure, and scared and not letting that stop him. This:
That means it's time for Ray to pull, because that's what he does best, is the thing you don't want.
is Ray. That is SO Ray. It's that youngest-child mentality, to an extent, and that's just what Ray does, and seems to struggle with it.
And you totally nailed Fraser, too. He was very much the man in charge in that episode, and Ray knew that, even though he tried to fight his own battle. (Because he's Ray, and that's what he does.) And you've got their dynamic down, you just...you have it down. This is so them, and so wonderful. And the kiss was so real, and poignant, and urgent, and it just makes sense. Oh, man, I wish you'd write them more. This was wonderful.
And the end:
He's getting what he wants. He's covered in blowback.
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But but but! Oh God, I love this so much. I reread it, to refresh it in my head, and it's even better the second time around. I know I've said, MANY times, that I love your Ray, and that hasn't changed a bit. He's Ray, and he's interesting, and insecure, and scared and not letting that stop him. This:
That means it's time for Ray to pull, because that's what he does best, is the thing you don't want.
is Ray. That is SO Ray. It's that youngest-child mentality, to an extent, and that's just what Ray does, and seems to struggle with it.
And you totally nailed Fraser, too. He was very much the man in charge in that episode, and Ray knew that, even though he tried to fight his own battle. (Because he's Ray, and that's what he does.) And you've got their dynamic down, you just...you have it down. This is so them, and so wonderful. And the kiss was so real, and poignant, and urgent, and it just makes sense. Oh, man, I wish you'd write them more. This was wonderful.
And the end:
He's getting what he wants. He's covered in blowback.
And it's fuck-up time.
Is total killer. GUH.