ext_938 ([identity profile] tigs.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2006-08-13 06:28 pm (UTC)

Oh, ouch.

I really liked, though, how you showed the slowly degrading relationship between Ray and Fraser--the line about Ray not telling Fraser anything anymore worked especially well in showing that, I thought--and how that contrasted wtih the slow build up of the relationship between Ray and Vecchio. Very nice.

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