ext_6156 ([identity profile] j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2006-09-26 04:30 pm (UTC)

Awww...really good.

“What’s the magic word?” she asked, like he was one of her nephews, and asked that God grants her grace not to staple Dewey’s pants to the desk.

Hee!!! (Though there's still a grammar issue with that sentence. Should be: "and asked that God grant her grace..." (subjunctive) (Also, for your reference, there's no A in "definitely." On any continent. :) It's related to the word "finite.")

The Lieutenant hadn’t been happy with Frannie’s pink thing, at first. Then, she pointed out that no cop would ever steal pink pens with fluff balls on the end, or sparkly pencil sharpeners. So, in fact, she was saving the Chicago Police Department valuable money, which could go into crime prevention.

Yes! Smart girl! I like this Frannie.

I like even more that she actually became a cop, though her little fantasy at the end is kind of sad and wistful.

But since Fraser's up north, living happily ever after with RayK, it doesn't bother me TOO much. :)

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