ext_6156 ([identity profile] j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2006-11-03 07:37 am (UTC)

Wow, oh, wow. I'm very impressed!

I grow cold... I grow cold...
I'm gonna wear these long johns til they grow mold.

Am I gonna spike my hair? Do I dare eat caribou?
I'm gonna wear red union suits and walk on snowshoes.


Hee!!

This is just wonderful. I must confess I don't care for the original--my quirk, or maybe I just don't get what T.S. Eliot was after. I don't care for characters like Prufrock that seem pathetic to me and without redeeming features. But Ray, I LOVE. And your version, I LOVE. Starting it off with the lyrics to "De Cara a la Pared" (Face to the Wall), Ray's dancing song, was truly inspired, as well. Kudos!

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