Goody, you did the long version, and so soon after we talked about it, too! Goody, goody.

I really admire how vividly Ray's movements come across. Cinematic. This AU fits them like a glove.


PS: a few keystrokes too many: "HisThe grin reminded him his cheek he'd recently been clocked in the face by the guy", "not looking too tough just then. , and Ray decided", "caught him looking [and] winked", "The botHe narrowed", "I wOre my pointy-toed boots"