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omphale ([personal profile] omphale) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2007-01-16 05:52 pm (UTC)

I like this Ray--he feels sad and lonely and real, somehow.

He had no right to watch that moment. There was no place for him here.

I love this line. He's unhappy, but he's also smart and self-aware. Nice job.

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