omphale (
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2007-01-16 05:52 pm (UTC)
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I like this Ray--he feels sad and lonely and real, somehow.
He had no right to watch that moment. There was no place for him here.
I love this line. He's unhappy, but he's also smart and self-aware. Nice job.
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He had no right to watch that moment. There was no place for him here.
I love this line. He's unhappy, but he's also smart and self-aware. Nice job.