ext_14348 ([identity profile] shihadchick.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2007-05-22 10:11 am (UTC)

Ohh, I LOVE this, and I am all kinds of thrilled that you took the happier direction (because I am a happy place kinda girl myself, generally :D) and just... YAY. I love the build through it, the way the cold fades into heat as the story takes us along, and the way you use the details theme- I don't think I have the proper vocabulary for it, but the way it was a thing Ray's worried about, thinks he doesn't have a grasp on and then the focus comes ever more strongly onto what he DOES have a grasp on in the there-and-now really, really worked for me.

Fraser is pressing his mouth against Ray's shoulder, now, right where his flannel shirt opens at the neck, is sucking him there, with just a little bit of teeth, and Ray is fucking shaking here
Ngh. That's just-- that is hot and just incredibly yum. And I love Fraser's hand sliding Ray's leg before this, too, that's a total bulletproof Thing here. *grins madly*


And, oh, the last section especially, the reflective bit (it's kind of too long to copy-paste it all, I think) is just so beautifully worded and made my heart kind of go *squish* and just-- YAY. Great fic, and excellent use of being trapped on a plane, and welcome home yourself, babe. <3

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