ext_6556 ([identity profile] arrow00.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2007-06-22 02:28 am (UTC)

Oh, wow. So *much* to love in this.

>If a smile could be like crying, that's what it would look like<

Aw, woobie!

Ghost Fraser was just perfect, so believable. I usually don't go for supernatural stuff, but this was just a touch, and it was a perfect touch. Loved how Fraser obliquely revealed he'd been visited too; the whole thing about the dental hygiene of wolves and their gluttonous impulses.

>I'm so sorry, the ghost had said, tears freezing on his face, so so sorry. . .<

Ah! So chilling and perfect the way this brought the whole thing right back after Fraser's laconic "What brings you to Canada."

>Fraser looked shocked, which almost never happened.<

!

>God, it was like stripping all the wall paper out of his brain and putting in new carpet all at once,<

Perfect Ray-brain!

>Fraser, though, was not completely disgusting. Not even partially.<

Not even. :)

Loved the hug when he first came in, and the frizzle-kiss at the end and Ray's smugness.

Lovely story.





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