Oh, this is really good! I liked the way you wrote the hot and cold causing a gentle rain in Ray's apartment. Over Ray's dead body would this warm living Fraser become an ice-covered ghost. Yes, that's the idea.

it was like stripping all the wall paper out of his brain and putting in new carpet all at once, Excellent Ray voice! And Ray thinking it through, drinking snot, aliens and cocksucking, and Fraser not being so disgusting at all, actually.

If you ever decide to go back and write the long version, I'd love to read it.