Sorry about the squicky - this to me is only a minor squicky sort of thing. And you know, kids (boys especially, I guess) play those gross-out games and that's what came to mind here. I didn't have it planned out this way or anything, but in retrospect, I think the point to it is that there's this kind of early adolescent homophobia that Ray is eschewing here. He's growing out of that in the course of a couple of paragraphs, becoming more mature as he really considers his response to the situation. He has the choice to be all "eww, cock!" or to realize that he loves this person and the person's plumbing just isn't really that important. So the squicky is part of that immaturity, thematically, and taking it out would actually make a fundamental change to the way the story works. It was intended to be amusing rather than disturbing, though (you probably don't want to see what I would consider disturbing) and I apologize for the inadvertent causing of unsettlement.

Thanks for the kind words! I am working on the expansion now, although I've spent the last day of work on it having been overrun by an unexpected squadroom full of geese. I'm not sure where those geese came from, and I'm not sure they're staying. It was just one of those weird things that happens sometimes when you're writing and you finish a scene and go, "what just happened?! where the fuck did all these geese come from?" So, yeah, working on it, but it's not exactly going according to plan. Still, I'm hopeful that it may yet come together, with or without geese.