ext_9238 ([identity profile] joandarck.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction2007-08-08 03:01 am

Five Challenge – by joandarck

Fraser/RayK, (RayV/Stella)
Length: 485 words
Rating: PG




Five Times Fraser Compared Ray and Ray



pivotal

"Well, that's the troubling thing. I agree that Ray Vecchio was a fine figure of a man. But it seems I can't be around this new Ray for more than five minutes without developing this very strong, well-nigh uncontrollable desire to bend him over a desk."

Dief sniffed as they walked along.

"Oh, because your remarks about mating are never crude."



late

"It's all right, you big... Yes, I'm still your friend. I want to be your best friend still, Benny, can you tell me that?"

Ray coughed on the phone. The bullet was out, and the internal wounds were healing.

"I... I think I can. Yes."

Ray's voice was quiet on the line, scratched like an old record. "Because he's something more. Right?"

Fraser wanted to lie, but didn't have the practice. Maybe he half-managed it. "He's something... different."

"And that's why I'm telling you to stay up there."



early

The evidence, laid out on the desk under a disguising file folder, was clear. This was almost incontrovertibly not the real Ray Vecchio. However, he suspected the Lieutenant would still prove recalcitrant on the issue. He had measured every conceivable body part, every aspect of Ray that he'd had the opportunity to observe – oh. Well, not quite.

Benton Fraser pulled his hat straight, took a deep breath, and followed his quarry into the men's room.

Calipers were no good here. He'd have to estimate.



before anything

"Someday, my simple-minded Canadian friend, you're going to meet somebody even more irritated by you than me, and then, then you are going to understand just how patient and forbearing I am being right now."

"If you say so, Ray."

Privately, he didn't believe it was possible.



ultimately

The Vecchios had retired for the night. Ray looked well; Florida suited him. He'd tanned, and gained a little weight. The bitterness, the constant struggle, were submerged, blended out into a kind of wry humour. And Stella seemed happy: warm and smiling. He could understand why his own Ray had been so devoted to her.

The couple had a tenderness together that he would never have expected, but he believed it entirely.

"Now you're being ridiculous."

"Just say it." Ray nibbled and ran his lips over the area behind Fraser's ear. "Say it, say it, say it..."

Fraser was up to his elbows in dishwashing suds.

"You've both aged very well," he said patiently, hearing his voice change whether he willed or no. Even now, Ray could do this to him.

"But."

Ray dug his chin into Fraser's shoulder and started letting his hands wander, somewhere between an enticement and a warning.

"But, say it, Fraser..."

He looked at their reflection in the window and wondered, to the bottom of his soul, how he'd ended up in this unexpected, eccentric, beautiful life.

"But you've kept much more of your hair."

"Thank you. Was that so hard?" Ray was pleased.

The wash water began cooling, forgotten.

 

[identity profile] vsee.livejournal.com 2007-08-15 10:36 am (UTC)(link)
This is really, really enjoyable. I wil be coming back to this one often!

[identity profile] arrow00.livejournal.com 2007-08-22 06:26 am (UTC)(link)
Yay for this!

"Oh, because your remarks about mating are never crude."

!!! I *love* it when he snarks at Dief.



This was fucking brilliant. I ate it with a spoon.
eledhwenlin: (Default)

[personal profile] eledhwenlin 2008-07-22 07:13 am (UTC)(link)
The last one killed me. ♥

[identity profile] idreamedmusic.livejournal.com 2010-06-16 09:40 pm (UTC)(link)
I just read this as someone was searching for it and eeeeee, soo good!
Cannot pick a favorite as they're all brilliant. Short, to the point, funny, and poignant.

Thank you!

[identity profile] idreamedmusic.livejournal.com 2010-06-19 09:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, splooshing out in the end really worked because all the teas-y snippets before worked as a sort of foreplay. Really, wub this!

[identity profile] azamiko.livejournal.com 2011-10-05 05:56 am (UTC)(link)
*grin*

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