ext_2561 ([identity profile] zabira.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2008-03-25 07:36 pm (UTC)

there are so many great things in this story. it hurts in such an immediate, intense and REAL way, that it's a beautiful thing, but i think my favorite part is this:

"So show me how to make a proper fist, Ray."

i love how audrey instinctively does the thing that is going to help ray come to grips with what happened, by giving him something to do to help THEM. it's very elegant and emotionally satisfying, and i love that it comes FROM her and isn't something imposed by his grief and anger. *sigh* it's hopeful, in a very tough-minded way.

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