ext_6156 ([identity profile] j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2008-06-09 08:50 am (UTC)

This is terrific. Really well crafted.

“Oh, I think your turtle is very loyal, Ray.” And that cracked me up. It's so Fraser! He would totally say that. :)

And this line was very DS and very Ray:

After Stella left, his forces had been pretty much stuck at low tide for months, stinking of dead fish.

I loved watching Fraser figure out what he really wanted.

Delightful short piece. \o/

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