ext_1543 ([identity profile] chalcopyrite.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2008-09-07 04:32 pm (UTC)

Oh, man, just rip my heart out and stomp on it, why don't you. Here, I'll even spot you a spoon. Painful and yet beautifully done; I think you nailed the voices and there's fantastic Ray/Ray interaction. I love that the way they love each other and know each other so well doesn't make it any easier or better, it makes it harder, but something that can be overcome. Top marks, and hey, I guess I wasn't really using that left ventricle anyway.

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