http://thursdaynext-27.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] thursdaynext-27.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2010-05-05 04:21 am (UTC)

\o/ This made me so happy. I love the Rays like this! Sweet and funny and adorkable. And maybe you can resurrect the porn as an epilogue :-)

The hospital scene. Kowalski's eyeball issues. Ray's observations about Kowalski's morning attire. All fantastic.

A few of my favorite lines:

with Kowalski, to hunch is to act

"Upon reflection," Welsh informed them agreeably, "I find you worth the space you take up."

Then he started thinking about other parts of Kowalski that were covered by blankets and ratty underwear, and he told himself he was a bad, bad man, and he went to make the coffee.

He'd kissed Kowalski while the guy was half-conscious on a gurney in the ambulance, like Prince Moron and Bleeding Beauty. What was he, unhinged?

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