I really like it that you decided to show this through Stella's eyes, and I think the world you created around her is very vivid.

The "important" man thing comes across well. It's a good theme. If Stella can't see (or doesn't want to see) that RayK is just as important in his own way as RayV is, then that's sad.

Still, I'm glad she and RayV have a life they want. :)