ext_1175: (Longjohns)
lamardeuse ([identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2003-06-27 01:37 pm (UTC)

Wow. This is so true, and raw.

I could never in a million years hit her, but I guess she thinks I could.

She’s killing me.


That really got me--that Stella would reach that point, because it's the complete opposite of how Ray is. That line more than anything else shows that distance between them, I think.

And (you know me!) I loved the epiphany Ray achieves in the last line. There's hope in this, as well. Wonderful job.

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