ext_12440 ([identity profile] brooklinegirl.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2003-07-01 06:57 am (UTC)

Lovely! And I'm all for over-the-word-limit fics. Can't seem to stick to under 1,000 words to save my life. And this...oh, this I just didn't want to end. I love the balance you get here: young, relatively innocent Fraser, but he's certainly in touch with his sexual side. Loved this:
He tasted like beer and tobacco, and he smelled like sweat and horses and hay, and faintly like new life. I was painfully erect, I felt empty, hungry, deep in my belly, and it all felt like falling.

And this:
He grinned up at me and I felt myself responding with a smile, and then...

"Dear God."


Perfect Fraser response. Lovely, lovely story!



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