Someone wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction 2003-07-28 11:04 pm (UTC)

Chapter 1???

Does this mean we'll get more of this hilarious stuff?

I hope so!!!

My one... um ... suggestion is that instead of 'blue eyes' Ray needs "cerulean orbs," azure, cornflower etc. I did like Ben's 'sparkling flame grey eyes' as others have said and Ray's 'shimmering waves of thick international hailing distress yellow hair that fell to her waist,' is just too funny.

Julia

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