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lamardeuse ([identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction2004-01-26 07:16 pm

I can't believe nobody's grabbed this one yet...

...maybe because it's such a cliché. But hey, I am Princess Cliché! And boy, are these glass slippers killing me...


F/K (what else?), 368 words, PG-13 (at least) for language and sexual situations. And I've been inspired by these fabulous dialogue-only pieces, so here goes:






Afterglow
by lamardeuse



"Ray. Ray. Ray."

"Hunh? Wha?"




"Fraser. What."

"I can't believe you--fell asleep."

"Newsflash, Frase. I'm a guy."

"Thank you; I've deduced that fact for myself by now."

"Ha ha. You're a regular Sherlock Holmes. What I mean is, guys tend to short out, right? Like, afterwards."

"I wouldn't know."

"You telling me you never conked out on somebody?"



"Right. Yeah. That's probably in the Mountie manual, too, right under how to spit shine the boots."

"I'm sorry I even mentioned--"

"No, you're--you're entitled, okay? And I'm sorry, all right?"

"A--All right."

"Truth is, you...wore me out."



"Don't look so shocked. You can't be that innocent."

"I--"

"Or maybe you're fishin'. S'okay, I can dig that. That's a guy thing, too."

"Ray, what are you--"

"Climbing on top of you. Shut up. And open up your ears, 'cause I'm probably only gonna say this once."



"You want to know what you do to me? Fine. But I'm not gonna lie here and talk about my feelings for an hour and a fucking half. Stella expected me to do that sometimes, and it felt like writing a pop quiz where I didn't know a single goddamn answer. And I bet you can deduce what I thought of that.

"Point is, I may not always want to bask in the afterglow. I'm not a glowy kind of guy. But I'll show you what you mean to me, every way I know how. I'll drive a car into the lake they call Michigan. I'll take a bullet for you. I'll blow you til the top of your gorgeous head comes off. I'll die for you if I have to--"

"God, R--"

"--shut up, I said. Get this: I don't do this unless it means something. Unless it means everything. You get me?"

"Yes. God, yes. For me--it's the same for me."

"Good."






"Ray?"

"Hmmm?"

"You can--mmm--go back to sleep if you like."

"Nuh-uh. You got me up, you're just gonna have to--oh, yeah--deal with the consequences."

"I believe I can handle--"

"Christ, Frase--"

"--the responsibility."

"Mmm, yeah, I love it when you get responsible, Mountie-man."




End

[identity profile] lynnmonster.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 12:09 am (UTC)(link)
Oooh, hot AND funny AND sweet!

(And I love it when Fraser gets responsible, too! *g*)

[identity profile] tobyfan.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 12:10 am (UTC)(link)
Hee! Cute! Ray's voice is so perfect!

[identity profile] sihayab.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 12:15 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, what fun!!!!

Love this loads!
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[identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 12:41 am (UTC)(link)
Newsflash, Frase...I'm a guy.

--and I was hooked. This is wonderful! Oh, if only it could have been part of the series. I'd even settle for having to watch on HBO.

[identity profile] estrella30.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 12:42 am (UTC)(link)
This was fantastic! So sweet and funny and very Ray and Fraser. I definitely heard them in this. Terrific job!

[identity profile] chickwriter.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 01:59 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! This was fun and something I needed today. You totally rock.

[identity profile] brooklinegirl.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 02:01 am (UTC)(link)
Killing me, killing me, wiping me out here, because: yes. Cliche, yes, perfect cliche. Such a fucking Ray cliche! Falling asleep, oh yes.

Ray, so eloquent with his way of speaking:

don't do this unless it means something. Unless it means everything. You get me?"

And Fraser, just as damn fucking eloquent with his silence. That's important, is what that is, the stuff that Fraser doesn't say, the stuff that overwhelms him, cuts right to the heart of him.

This is so much, shown with so little. ::witchbaby writhes with envy::

Yes.

[identity profile] chesamus.livejournal.com 2004-01-27 02:32 am (UTC)(link)
:-0 :-) :-0 This is me giggling with glee, can you tell?
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[identity profile] imkalena.livejournal.com 2004-01-28 01:14 am (UTC)(link)
I can't believe nobody's grabbed this one yet...

It was waiting for YOU, baby! Man, I am all OVER your sweet, innocent Fraser who really doesn't know whether he'd conk out on somebody after sex or not.

And Ray -- holy moly, what a declaration!! If I didn't love those guys already, I'd have fallen for both of them with a big splat just over this. :)

[identity profile] kassrachel.livejournal.com 2004-01-28 10:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh -- this is fantastic! Gorgeous work, and in so few words, too!

Hot and sweet and funny, as others have observed -- the trifecta of fanfiction perfection. :-)

[identity profile] pollitt.livejournal.com 2004-02-02 06:23 am (UTC)(link)
Totally a late response, but... Awwww, hot and funny. And what a RayK kind of romantic declaration ;9

loverly.