Silence, by Girl Clone

[claire.livejournal.com]

(I haven't yet read any of the others, I hope I haven't accidently copied someone's idea or anything).


I've often wondered just what would happen if I just went ahead and told him. Would he kick me in the head? Would he laugh? Would he tell me “Thanks, but no thanks. When I said I'd try anything, I didn't mean that.” Would he smile that brilliant smile and say “Me too.”

I've spent so much time wondering what would happen if I told him, that I hadn't considered what would happen if I didn't tell him.

“Frase”, he says fidgeting, “I kinda have feelings for someone”.

And for the first time in my life I just cannot speak.

Comments

[china_shop]

Ooh, I like this a lot. Excellent voices, and a lovely sting in the tail. Yay!

[serialkarma.livejournal.com]

OH! Excellent!

[engenda.livejournal.com]

Ohh. Wow. This is great!

[mergatrude.livejournal.com]

Oh wow! I'm hanging on the edge of my seat, not sure if I want to know what happens next!

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

Hmm. You're sneaky. Greatness.

[akite.livejournal.com]

Come on, Fraser. Talk! Good one, Girl Clone.

[dementia-12.livejournal.com]

I like it - short and bittersweet. ^^

[lilac-one.livejournal.com]

I hope the next words out of Ray's mouth are something along the lines of, "And that someone is you." But not so cliched.

Nice work here.

[tyk.livejournal.com]

clever use of the challenge. you evoke so much in a very few words.

[ilexa.livejournal.com]

Oh, I liiiiiiiiiike that. Very, very well done.

[buddleia.livejournal.com]

Oh, niiice. I like the fidgeting.

[sjkasabi.livejournal.com]

What good idea, and a lovely, tight way to exploit it too! Gorgeous.

[sprat.livejournal.com]

Oh, eep. Poor Fraser! This is really great!

[merelyn.livejournal.com]

Yay. I love how you managed to put so much into a 100 words. That said, I really want more!!

[rjm-257.livejournal.com]

I'm excited but scared, too... this could -so- go both ways, as I'm sure you know. The F/K shipper in me is yelling "He's in love with you, Fraser!" but there's a part that's hiding over Fraser's shoulder, waiting to give him a hug when Ray says someone else's name...

[gurrier.livejournal.com]

I've spent so much time wondering what would happen if I told him, that I hadn't considered what would happen if I didn't tell him.

This is beautiful! Fraser's fear, his blind spot, the way you counterpoint the way he talks without saying anything with his silence here. Lovely.