Squeak!

I hope this makes it in under the wire!


Tonight it had been there. Hard run chase, takedown, arrest, a broadly approving grin. Closeness, wavelength, mingled salt-sweat humidity and victorious exhaustion, as they sat sagged for a moment in the seats of the idling GTO. Partners now, so evident as to render acknowledgment superfluous. Truly, understood. Yes?

Tonight it was there. Thin, strong, long fingered hands to wrap around him, warm and welcome, sure and knowing, and yes, oh yes... take control and let him fall away completely. Let him close his eyes and throw back his head, subject for once only to the sensations surging through his body, with no distracting reminders of who he was, and what he was doing to himself. Supple, stroking hands pulling him further and further away from the discordant racket that so often marred this for him. Background arguments, rationalizations about hygiene and necessity and propriety and humiliation -- if not in the act, than for the pathetic solitude of it. All this washed away now in an onrushing current of pleasure, thick and full, rising and swirling in to fill every space, pore, cell, synapse... yes, Ray, please... Pulsing along, a rocketing rhythm, decreasing period, point, to point, to point, harder and faster and tighter and louder and out, he was crying, calling, keening release as hot spats of come jarred him back to the rough reality of his own hands and a Hudson's Bay blanket.

Oh man

[identity profile] ardent-muses.livejournal.com 2003-05-13 10:04 pm (UTC)(link)
You did it again, Dude. I'm glad I didn't read this before I posted. *G*

Yummy, crunchy words, doing double and triple duty -- telling how it feels and, more importantly, how it *feels*.

I love the parallel structure, too.

You filled my Fraser-angst cup right to the brim. Beautiful!

(Anonymous) 2003-05-13 10:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Whoa, that hurt. Ray was really, really there, and then he was just . . . gone. Poor Fraser. Wait! I can see Ray from here!

Karen
waving madly to catch Ray's attention
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[identity profile] the-star-fish.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 04:24 am (UTC)(link)
Wheeeee! Lookit you, writing!!!

Loved it. Mmmmmyeah. Gorgeous.
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[identity profile] beledibabe.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 05:22 am (UTC)(link)
::sniffle::

::quivering lip::

::catch of breath::

Okay, so, like, you're going to write a sequel, right? In which Ray admits he's hot for Fraser's body, throws away the damn blanket and takes care of Fraser so thoroughly that he never needs to jerk off again?

Right?
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[identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 05:51 am (UTC)(link)
Can I just say...DITTO to this?
What an amazing combo of words this is!
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[identity profile] beledibabe.livejournal.com 2003-05-15 08:21 am (UTC)(link)
but this was where I was at when I thought I had to post or miss the challenge altogether.

Uh, may I just say three words?

Sod the challenge.

Write the rest, so I can stop fretting about poor Fraser and get on with my life! Please. With sugar on top. And maybe some of those little chocolate sprinkles that actually taste like chocolate and not tiny wax hamster turds.

::batting eyes::

Mmmmmm?
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[identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 05:49 am (UTC)(link)
Rowan! This is superb. You paint so beautifully with words.

[identity profile] kist.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 07:37 am (UTC)(link)
Ooooh, very nice. I like the tone of desperation, and I was yanked back to reality along with Fraser.

[identity profile] umbo.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 10:53 am (UTC)(link)
That was great. I'm with the folks who want a sequel ;-)

[identity profile] bluster.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 12:57 pm (UTC)(link)
*sniffle!*

What's sad is I can picture Ray at home on the couch having a similar experience. :-( I join the calls for a sequel.

Although anything you want to write is fine by me.

Re:

[identity profile] bluster.livejournal.com 2003-05-15 10:08 am (UTC)(link)
You can make me sniffle anytime. Sniffling can be a good thing.

And if you write a sequel you can steal anything you want. :-)

[identity profile] rubyrosered.livejournal.com 2003-05-14 03:45 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. This is... beautiful.

Even if it did kind of tear my heart out.

[identity profile] bethbethbeth.livejournal.com 2003-05-15 02:57 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, yes. Just...yes!

(Lovely, R'ski! This makes me so happy/sad/happy. Now...for the *other* 100K of this story.... *g*)