ext_7027 ([identity profile] katallison.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction2003-06-22 03:47 pm

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This challenge *rocks.* One thing I've been enjoying in some of the stories ([livejournal.com profile] shellmidwife's and [livejournal.com profile] heuradys's, for example) is writers taking the opportunity to use some of their own specific professional knowledge in the documents they create. So this weekend, after several grueling days of getting new college students oriented and registed, and scribbling reams of file notes, I found this floating into my head. It's wayyyy over the word limit, so I'm posting it on my own webspace rather than in LJ, with apologies for inconvenience. Just a bit of silly fluff, but I had fun writing it.
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[identity profile] beledibabe.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 01:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Url, please? I can't find it! ::tearing hair::
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[identity profile] theodosia.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 02:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Wouldn't call it fluff at all!!! It has the advantage of feeling very true to life, and true to the way things very well might have gone for the character. Brava!

[identity profile] bethbethbeth.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 02:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Not fluff. It's so Ray...and so *my* students (or a few of them, at least). And you know, I've been teaching long enough now, that I've had some former students who were lovely people, but just not academically inclined, pop back into view (visiting me in my office or sending an email after ten years) with news about how they actually ended up finding their niche in business or art or design or whatever. This was a very cool background piece for Ray's life.
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[identity profile] beledibabe.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 02:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. If this is the sort of thing you have to do every day, I tip my hat in your direction!

Yeah, this was Ray. Great characterization, and I loved the misspellings in his letter, too. ::g::

Very interesting, both as an insight into a young Ray, and as an example of your job.

[identity profile] umbo.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 02:30 pm (UTC)(link)
God, Kat, that was *wonderful*. Loved it loved it loved it. So glad of any small part I had in inspiring you.
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[identity profile] cesperanza.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 10:42 pm (UTC)(link)
I don't know if this will make you happy or not, but one of the challenges in the list is "college-age characters"--Fraser and Rays and Frannie and Welsha and all that. *g* So you may be able to draw on this for a later story!

This rocked, btw. And yeah, it was so real, academically, and so Ray, characterologically. This is the best challenge. Love this.
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[identity profile] akite.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 05:30 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm one of those less eloquent students. :) Wow, Kat, just wow! I love this challenge!
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[identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 05:34 pm (UTC)(link)
I love your OFC, the advisor. She seems grounded in reality, with liberal doses of compassion and concern. Reading this paper trail of Ray's college life was alternately painful and inspiring, but always quite believable. I like the hopeful note at the end, even if we know what did and did not work out in Ray's life.

[identity profile] imkalena.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 05:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, lordy!! That gave me freakin' chills about being back in college, which was right along the same lines as high school, except I had more fun and more friends. I must have had an advisor, at least on paper, but the only person who ever gave me any advice was the doctor at Student Health Services who told me to get to a dentist NOW, because the packing had come out of my wisdom tooth incision and the nerve was bare.

[identity profile] ozsaur.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 06:11 pm (UTC)(link)
I laughed every time I saw "gave pep talk" she seems to do that a lot. I really liked her and I liked seeing a young Ray through her eyes.

[identity profile] moxie-brown.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 06:58 pm (UTC)(link)
That was great; I loved Ray's ups and downs through college, very true to life.

[identity profile] ardent-muses.livejournal.com 2003-06-22 11:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Kat, I enjoyed this immensely! First of all, your HTML ability is awe-inspiring. (But that's not the most important thing. *G*)

I felt like I *was* your OFC as I was reading, and I felt sad that she was putting so much into this kid who was just going to walk blithely away -- hopefully better off. It reminded me of teaching -- knowing that you needed to give them everything and not expect anything back. Like Kalena, I had nobody like this in HS or college, and I really could have used one.

Some great little human moments here: when she told him not taking a student loan was "dumb", when she enquired into whether there would be a third dependent, and her pegging of Stella as "petulant". I also loved Ray's sweet, misspelled letter.

I was sorry Ray didn't go to school there for another year. *G* Wonderful piece.

[identity profile] kassrachel.livejournal.com 2003-06-23 05:05 am (UTC)(link)
Lovely work, Kat! Way to draw on real-life experience to create a character who (even just via her notes) is charming, vivid, and real.

And I loved her view of college-age Ray.

[identity profile] rowanfairchild.livejournal.com 2003-06-23 07:20 am (UTC)(link)
LOL! I always knew I had a deep connection with Ray! Aside from the awful flashbacks *g*, this was terrific and rich with the kinds of details (both real and speculative) that I adore. Great take on the challenge, Kat!

[identity profile] brooklinegirl.livejournal.com 2003-06-23 09:32 am (UTC)(link)
This was so cool! I love this little peek into Ray's life. I'm with the others, I love the idea of him in a suit, with a haircut and a wedding band (and most probably a smirk). But I truly do love this little aside: Pretty young woman, looks a bit petulant. Ah, that's Stella to a T, methinks.

Academic advisor flash

(Anonymous) 2003-06-24 12:02 am (UTC)(link)
This was terrific re: DS but it was completely different from my college advisement experience. In my department, the "advisor" was the department secretary, and "advisement" consisted of taking your intended schedule to her before registration, her asking if you were sure you had the prerequisites and that you had chosen correctly, followed by her stamping and signing your form. Then you'd say "see you next semester" and that would be it.

BK

[identity profile] lynnmonster.livejournal.com 2003-06-24 09:00 am (UTC)(link)
This was great. I loved how the sense of low-grade (heh) frustration and discouragement on both ends affects both Ray and his advisor but doesn't make either of them give up.

[identity profile] raveninthewind.livejournal.com 2004-03-29 08:15 am (UTC)(link)
Lovely story.

My mother-in-law works with at-risk teens, and she's got 40 years of experience/training in special education. She says that the consistent factor in the lives of the kids who "made it" despite really disadvantaged backgrounds is that there was at least one adult in their lives who cared, and the child knew that the concern was real and personal.

So even if it doesn't seem like like the help is acknowledged at the time it's given, seeds can be planted that will flourish later.

3 years later what now?

[identity profile] shoemaster.livejournal.com 2006-04-12 04:22 am (UTC)(link)
Ray dropped in en route to Soc final; almost didn't recognize him, he had a suit (!) and a haircut, and a wedding band. Said he figured he'd give Anderson a heart attack. Looked about 12, but v. happy.

Oh Ray, god I can just picture that so well. It kind of hurt watching him struggle through at the beginning, but it sort of? worked out, the cop thing, if not the Stella bit. Very nice piece :D