ext_3545: Jon Walker, being adorable! (Dief by Heuradys)
Dira Sudis ([identity profile] dsudis.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction2003-09-26 06:36 am

Movie challenge

Home movies are movies, right? And Ray only has the one home movie that matters, but even Dief got sick of watching it after a year or so. I told him he could have a hundred words, and this is what he said:



I discovered my favorite thing about the kid when we were packing videotapes, and I realized David had never seen my homer. Turned out he'd never seen baseball, period. I went through the whole inning, play by play, til he was as excited as me when I hit that ball.

I looked up and Fraser was watching us, and that's when I knew why I put up with all the lost sleep and screaming.

Because that's my favorite thing about the kid: the way Ben smiled, and shook his head, and sat down to tell him how it really happened.

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Love it!

[identity profile] theodosia.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 11:14 am (UTC)(link)
Home movies definitely count!
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[identity profile] the-star-fish.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 11:35 am (UTC)(link)
Aww! ::sniff:: Very touching, and very Ray.

[identity profile] auburnnothenna.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 12:22 pm (UTC)(link)
Aw, sweet. Fraser might be sick of the video tape, but he'll never be sick of seeing Ray happy.
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[identity profile] akite.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 01:29 pm (UTC)(link)
Awww...that was so sweet!

[identity profile] chesamus.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 01:41 pm (UTC)(link)
One wonders just how many times one can fall in love with these two. Obviously I'm not close to my limit...

[identity profile] bluster.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 02:15 pm (UTC)(link)
This is great. I can definitely see it playing out just like this. *sigh* God I love these two, and I thank you for reminding me of one of the many reasons why.

[identity profile] rowanfairchild.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 03:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Aw, now see? This is what drabbles do best, make you imagine a whole little world in only 100 words. Lovely.

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[identity profile] rubyrosered.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 09:13 pm (UTC)(link)
That's so sweet! It paints a beautiful picture, but makes me want to fill in all the blanks at the same time.
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[identity profile] doll-revolution.livejournal.com 2003-09-26 09:28 pm (UTC)(link)
Because that's my favorite thing about the kid: the way Ben smiled, and shook his head, and sat down to tell him how it really happened.

that's my favorite thing about the fic: the way is shows how the kid affects ben and how much ray loves it.

[identity profile] ozsaur.livejournal.com 2003-09-28 02:32 pm (UTC)(link)
I love how a drabble shows so much in such a little space. You never once use the word love and yet that's what this story is all about. Wonderful!

[identity profile] fkfan.livejournal.com 2011-02-18 12:35 am (UTC)(link)
OMG, have just reread this for the umpteenth time and I wish you would write more. I love this story. Fraser needs to get over his reticence and David needs to relax. I'd love to see that happen where hugs were given by all at any time.

Brenda