Shakespeare

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I realize this isn't exactly what the challenge was meant to generate, but I sat down to write and this is what happened. I hope y'all enjoy. Many thanks to sanj and sihayab for giving me the go-ahead.

On To You


Pursuing my father's killers brought me hence:
I stayed for reasons reas'n knows nothing of.
It may be what I felt for Ray was love
(He never "led me on," in his defense.)
Too long I tarried North, and now I find
My partner's looks and manner passing strange.
I always feared I might wind up deranged
Given the way my dead speak in my mind
And no one now will look me in the eye
To tell me who this "Vecchio" may be.
It is as though nobody here but me
Can tell that aught's amiss, askew, awry.
Full fair found I my Ray's prominent face
But this Ray's fair of head, and arms, and gait.
It's true I've never been what you'd call "straight,"
But rare I'm this struck down by easy grace.
Am I deceived, or in those laughing eyes
Might interest lurk, a hint of what might come?
He flashes me a smile and I'm struck dumb
By every choice that now before me lies.
My father's ghost no useful answers gives.
My deaf half-wolf wants donuts, "Boston Kreme."
I feel I stumble in some waking dream
I know not where Ray is, or if he lives,
Or how this stranger's come to know so well
The details of our working partnership.
I watch him sling his holster at his hip
And wonder, could his hands speak, what they'd tell
Of history. Who is this man, and why
This clumsy subterfuge? His walk's not right,
His nose, his dress: I even checked his bite.
And yet, perverse, I find I'd like to try
To glean his story, given he knows mine.
We seem to work together very well.
And what the future holds, no man can tell:
Not even ghosts can cross that shadowed line.
This Ray's a bafflement, a mystery.
But duty calls, an arsonist to track:
I guess I trust this man to watch my back
Until such time as he'll divulge to me
His purpose here. Unless, of course, it's true
I've snapped and nothing's different than before...
Enough: it's time to work. My friend, the door.
But think not that I'm fooled. I'm on to you.

(367 words)

Comments

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Brilliant, darlin'! Fuckin' A!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

So glad you enjoyed! Thanks for your help!

[maubast.livejournal.com]

Ooh! God, I loved this! Definately a keeper.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly!

a small whiny voice from the corner

[sakana-iro.livejournal.com]

Ahh. I more or less managed to follow the references during the movies challenge and *nickers* Challenge, and *now* I find myself lost.

(Yes, that does mean I'm illiterate, because even here Shakespeare is still Shakespeare.)

Um. Hint, please?

Re: a small whiny voice from the corner

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

It's not actually Shakespeare. It's what Fraser might have been thinking during the season three opener, "Burning Down the House," written in Shakespearean-style rhyming iambic pentameter. :-)

[stinkybubbles.livejournal.com]

This is very clever. Nice job! Me likey.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Glad you enjoyed!

[brooklinegirl.livejournal.com]

utterly, utterly brilliant! Amazing use of the language! Extraordinarily Shakespearian! Love this particularly:
Too long I tarried North, and now I find
My partner's looks and manner passing strange.
I always feared I might wind up deranged

So very, very...Shakespeare. And Fraser. And perfect.

And this had me laughing out loud:
But this Ray's fair of head, and arms, and gait.
It's true I've never been what you'd call "straight,"

I love it!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much! As I wrote it, I could almost imagine Fraser speaking it -- obviously the show wasn't written in iambics, but somehow I have no trouble imagining Fraser that way...

[(Anonymous)]

What a lovely thing to read first thing in the morning. I'll have a smile on my face all day. This was marvelous!

--Kellie Matthews

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

So very glad you enjoyed it!

[basking-lizard.livejournal.com]

I *adore* this. Brilliantly done. I can completely picture Fraser expressing himself this way.

Who is this man, and why
This clumsy subterfuge? His walk's not right,
His nose, his dress: I even checked his bite.

hee! :D

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! Very glad to know you liked it.

[mamadeb.livejournal.com]

Oh, goodness.

Now I want to write a DS sonnet.

You have inspired evil.

In other words. This was truly great.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Glad you found it inspirational! :-)

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I don't write much formal poetry, as a rule, but I do enjoy iambics... :-)

[thehoyden.livejournal.com]

And no one now will look me in the eye
To tell me who this "Vecchio" may be.

Loved it! Very clever.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

Lovely Blair icon, btw.

[psquelly.livejournal.com]

Clever clever! I'm very impressed.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked it!

loved it!

[theodosia.livejournal.com]

Wow! Just... wow!

Re: loved it!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

Brilliant

[themoo37.livejournal.com]

By God's Hooks, this is brilliant.The rhyme, the meter, the sentence breaks mid-line. It's all there.

Re: Brilliant

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thanks! There are a few lines, and line breaks, that continue to make me really happy... :-)

[uselessplayback.livejournal.com]

I'm green with envy. This is fabulous! ^_^

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly! I'm so glad to know you enjoyed it. :-)

[lamardeuse.livejournal.com]

I. Fucking. Love. This.

That is all. :)

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

:-) I'm so glad you like it! Thanks for saying so.

[imkalena.livejournal.com]

Am I deceived, or in those laughing eyes
Might interest lurk, a hint of what might come?
He flashes me a smile and I'm struck dumb
By every choice that now before me lies.

You're freakin' amazing. I'm still sitting here with my mouth open.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you liked it!!! :-) Thanks for taking the time to say so.

[burntcopper.livejournal.com]

Amazing. Everyone's already pointed all the really fantastic bits, so I'm just going to sit and giggle at the donut 'n' Dief ref.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Oh, I'm glad you like the line about Dief and donuts -- that one cracks me up every time. :-)

[the-star-fish.livejournal.com]

All I can say is "You rock!!"

(And mighty lame it sounds, after that ^. *g*)

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

So glad you enjoyed! (And it does not either sound lame. Who doesn't like hearing "you rock" now and then?? :-)

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

'Tis true; 'tis true, 'tis pity, and pity 'tis, 'tis true,
I'd planned to tackle blank verse; but now I bow to you.
'Twas masterly, this ficlet, e'en brilliant: sharp and terse.
I'faith, methought 'twas Will himself, who penned thy clever verse!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

::blushes:: Thank you!! And your rhyme is marvelous -- I giggle every time I imagine Shakespeare penning the word "ficlet." :-)

[jenboo.livejournal.com]

You are amazing. Holy cow, that was brilliant! Wow, Kass...just wow!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :-)

What everybody said...

[(Anonymous)]

it's faboo, totally faboo. And I'm not sure I'm communicatinmg *anything* when you said everything and in iambic pentameter, no less! It's a real keeper, Kass, thank you,

Julia

Re: What everybody said...

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I'm awfully glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for saying so.

Holy cow...

[dementia-12.livejournal.com]

Wow, you could be the reincarnate of Shakespeare! That was greatness! Very clever - I espeically liked "It's true I've never been what you'd call "straight," ;p

Bravo! ^^ *throws roses*
(I definitely watche this if it ever comes to the playhouse ^^)

Re: Holy cow...

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly! I'm especially fond of the "straight" line, too... :-)

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

This was amazing!

I guess I trust this man to watch my back
Until such time as he'll divulge to me
His purpose here. Unless, of course, it's true
I've snapped and nothing's different than before...

Loved it, loved it.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much! :-)

Oh wow

[thermidor.livejournal.com]

(I could have sworn I commented on this already. Stupid LJ)

Kass, that was one of the most fantastic dS things I have ever read. The rhythm, the words, the emotion. I just love it.

Re: Oh wow

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

So glad you liked it! :-)

I hadn't written iambic pentameter in a while, and it was fun to remember how it works. Whee! *g*

[buzzylittleb.livejournal.com]

*tries to do iam pent*
*fails*
*worships you anyway*