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axiom of stripe ([personal profile] axiom_of_stripe) wrote in [community profile] ds_flashfiction2003-06-16 02:41 am

wire, wire, who's got the wire?

it's still before midnight in california, right?

*****

180 Degrees Double-drabble: Half-Wolf

Benton tapped his fingers against the cards, tapped the cards against the hard surface of Ray's desk, and disarranged the deck with another shuffle. He watched Ray watching Dief and wondered what Ray found so fascinating in the image of a wolf and a poodle lying down together.

Half-wolf, rather -- because wolves mated for life, but clearly Dief took after the domesticated side of his family on this issue. Perhaps living in the city was bad for him.

Benton tapped his fingers against the cards again and paused as Ray's hand came down over his. He could remember other games at this desk, other celebrations in the dark, and other hands covering his; when Ray said, "Enough gambling for tonight, okay? You've won all the air I got," Benton thought briefly, regretfully, of that other man named Ray before he caught Ray up and took his winnings in full.

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[identity profile] brooklinegirl.livejournal.com 2003-06-16 07:45 am (UTC)(link)
So nicely done...I like it, how easily you define their closeness in so few words. It's lovely, especially the final line.

[identity profile] ozsaur.livejournal.com 2003-06-16 09:45 am (UTC)(link)
It always amazes me when a writer manages to pack so much story into a few brief lines. The parallel between Dief and the poodle and Fraser and RayK is very clever.
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[identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com 2003-06-16 10:19 am (UTC)(link)
Always did get a grin from that seeming post-coital poodle 'n wolf twosome. And I agree that the last line is perfect. But then so are the rest of them.