door challenge, again

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

Stories like this hurt my brain to write. At least it's short.

160 words.


"That's the last coat, I think."

"I believe you're right."

Ray steps back, brush in hand, to admire his handiwork. "That is a damn fine door, if I do say so myself." He grins, squinting from the glare of late afternoon sunlight on the last of the spring snow.

Fraser smiles back at him. "It is at that, Ray."

"It's a damn fine cabin, too. We did good." Ray glances over, eyes crinkling. His free hand wanders over and brushes through Fraser's. When he looks down, the smile is gone from his face. "Sorry ... I keep forgetting."

"Ray." Fraser closes his eyes, jaw clenching with effort, then twines his fingers with Ray's. Ray squeezes his hand. "You did a beautiful job."

"Couldn't have done it without you, Ben." He inclines his head toward the house. "Come on inside. And no walking through the walls this time. It creeps me out when you do that."

Fraser squeezes back. "As you wish."

-end-

Comments

[jenboo.livejournal.com]

waaahhh!! Well, at least they're still together. *sniffle* Nicely done.

[imkalena.livejournal.com]

Eee! That kinda creeped ME out, too!

[mergatrude.livejournal.com]

Gah. Can't help thinking it would be so unfair. Sometimes you just have to write it, so good on you.

[sakana-iro.livejournal.com]

Oh dear. I'm beginning to develop a serious kink for ghost stories -- both mind-wreckingly hysterical ones and heart-breaking ones.

I loved this. Really loved it. Though it feels like one of the two most unfair things that can possibly happen!

It felt especially gripping that Ray grins, is taking the matter more or less in stride. And the shortness is very effective in this story.

You're the one did a beautiful job, brava!

[chesamus.livejournal.com]

What else can we expect when ghosts are canon? And at least they can touch each other. Liked this lots!

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

You jolted me there, my friend. Nicely done.

[akite.livejournal.com]

::sniffle:: Sad but beautiful.

[silverakira.livejournal.com]

[sniff] Sweet, in a sort of sad, heartbreaking way. I like it a lot though.

[And you know, for some strange reason, all the ghost stories I've read thus far have had Ray as the ghost. Which strikes me as odd cause I can imagine Fraser being a ghost, more so than Ray, with him having his dad's genes and whatnot.]

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

Writing this made me feel so guilty, because now I have to think about Ray at Fraser's funeral ... ::sniffle:: Glad you liked it.

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

Yay! ... I mean, oops. :-) Thanks for reading.

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

Perfect icon, btw. *g*

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

I was going to make this a happy story, but then I got the image of Fraser's hand being only sort-of there, and it all went crazy-downhill from that point. Thanks muchness.

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

::basks in the compliments:: Thank you kindly! I'm so glad you liked it.

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

I think I've been watching COTW and Ghostly!Bob too much lately. Thanks for reading! Glad you liked it.

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

Thank you muchness. That's a lovely compliment. :-)

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

It made me sniffle, too. Glad you liked it.

[jenboo.livejournal.com]

yeah, but you know, I'd think that Fraser would have already been in touch, so Ray would have just had to 'get through' the funeral and then head up north where he could build a cabin so he could be looney and live with his partner's ghost for the rest of his life.
I can see Fraser sitting next to or beside Ray during the funeral grousing about the services and Ray having a hard time not telling him to shut up. *g* It could be pretty funny if it was written the right way. :o)

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

I can't really see Ray as a ghost. I think he'd just be too cranky about it. :-) Thanks for reading. Glad you liked it.

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

Dude! Genius! I'm inspired now ... d'you mind if I steal this idea and try to run away to Canada with it?

[jenboo.livejournal.com]

go for it! Steal away. Just get me something while you're in Canada. *g*

[jenboo.livejournal.com]

by the way, I meant next to or behind Ray in the earlier post. I was sleepy when I wrote that...

[xsmoonshine.livejournal.com]

Nicely sad but sweet.

[wildmachinery.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly. :-)

[raveninthewind.livejournal.com]

Oh, I'm glad I didn't read this till you wrote the prequel. TOgether they have more impact.

This made me so sad. And very glad that it didn't happen in canon.