Yay! This is GREAT! It's cracktastic for sure, but it's definitely GOODfic! Really, really well done. In the hands of a real badfic author, Lola would have been one-dimensional and boring, but here she's great, and I really liked her! I burst out laughing when I realized she'd turned Ray into a cat! And he looked (and acted) exactly as Ray the Cat would. And on top of everything--a First Time story! You totally win!
Everyone is perfectly in character, especially Frannie, who's a comic device all by herself. Enough. “Yeah, yeah, je suis le grand fromage.” Frannie grabbed Fraser’s arm. (At a glance, the French all seems perfect, by the way.) Ray's thought processes described as a hamster on a wheel, Frannie's getting mistaken for a prostitute, Frannie's being jealous that Lola got the same reaction from Fraser that he always had to Frannie--and Frannie's not realizing that reaction isn't favorable. Hee!
I don't know what else to quote, because there are so many wonderful lines! I guess a few of the lines that broke me up the most:
When the sparklies cleared, the cat was gone. In the circle crouched a very confused, very naked (ew. Did that man ever eat?) Ray Kowalski. That reaction to Naked Ray has to be absolutely unique in fandom! ROFL!
“Besides, our cycles never fully matched up, so three weeks out of every month one of us was in a pissy mood. Mwahahahahaha!
Oh, and this reaction to the Fraser/RayK love scene is also unique and wonderful: “I, uh, didn’t know that was possible to do. Without dislocating something, I mean.” “Oh, no, I’ve done that before. It’s easier if you do yoga.”
Love it! And the two cousins getting drunk and commiserating over falling for the wrong guys...how great is that? This is just outstanding. A great plot, great characterizations, and hilarious to boot. What a great read.
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Date: 2006-04-17 01:17 am (UTC)Everyone is perfectly in character, especially Frannie, who's a comic device all by herself. Enough. “Yeah, yeah, je suis le grand fromage.” Frannie grabbed Fraser’s arm. (At a glance, the French all seems perfect, by the way.) Ray's thought processes described as a hamster on a wheel, Frannie's getting mistaken for a prostitute, Frannie's being jealous that Lola got the same reaction from Fraser that he always had to Frannie--and Frannie's not realizing that reaction isn't favorable. Hee!
I don't know what else to quote, because there are so many wonderful lines! I guess a few of the lines that broke me up the most:
When the sparklies cleared, the cat was gone. In the circle crouched a very confused, very naked (ew. Did that man ever eat?) Ray Kowalski.
That reaction to Naked Ray has to be absolutely unique in fandom! ROFL!
“Besides, our cycles never fully matched up, so three weeks out of every month one of us was in a pissy mood.
Mwahahahahaha!
Oh, and this reaction to the Fraser/RayK love scene is also unique and wonderful:
“I, uh, didn’t know that was possible to do. Without dislocating something, I mean.”
“Oh, no, I’ve done that before. It’s easier if you do yoga.”
Love it! And the two cousins getting drunk and commiserating over falling for the wrong guys...how great is that? This is just outstanding. A great plot, great characterizations, and hilarious to boot. What a great read.