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[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

It started innocently enough, and I'm sure that, after, we'll have no idea how it got out of hand.

Her mouth feels so wrong on me but his hands feel right as they brush against me. When I come, it's his name I yell, the hoarse cry surprising me.

I can't look at her as I lie, spent, on the sweat-soaked sheets. I just cling to him as he holds her close. We are three in bed, but I am alone.

I know that she's my sister and that this is wrong but Ray wants her and I want Ray.

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(Holy cow, I just wrote incest. I used to wonder what it would take to get me to write incest. Apparently, a laaarge glass of white wine will do it!)

Comments

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Woah. Very nice. In a, y'know, not-my-OTP-plus-incest kind of way. ;)

[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

*g* It was one of those things I never thought I'd write. I hate my muse. :-)

[akite.livejournal.com]

Never discount the muse or the wine. :-) This is one I'd like to read a back story on.

[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

Back story?!

No way! I'm too squicked! :-)

[cesperanza.livejournal.com]

Okay, um. I really liked this. And I'm willing to say so in public. And I would totally read more of this trio. In a heartbeat. I'd eat this with a spoon.

Fuck, I might have to write this trio. What a brilliant conceit.

[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

Okay, um. I really liked this. And I'm willing to say so in public.

*Grins*

And I would totally read more of this trio. In a heartbeat. I'd eat this with a spoon.

I'm sure there must be more of these three out there somewhere....

Fuck, I might have to write this trio. What a brilliant conceit.

*laughs* If you write it, I'd read it!

[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

Yeah, you'll turn into a perverted Mountie who's going to burn in hell! :-)

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

Y'know, ususally I like to point out individual lines that were particularly telling or moving or cleverly written, but every single one in this drabble is right on the money. It is a shocking story, but I'm with everyone in that I really liked it. And I'm not even squicked that I do, because it's fascinating, not disgusting. And the feeling of being alone though one of three in a bed is actually right on the money. I won't tell you how I know that.

[tikiaceae.livejournal.com]

wow...

poor fraser...

[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

Thank you for all the detailed feedback. Makes this drabbler feel like she wrote something important. :-)

[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

Poor, pathetic, needy Fraser indeed.

[cesperanza.livejournal.com]

I'm sure there must be more of these three out there somewhere....

You know, I'd have to doublecheck with a big ol' fic ho like bethbethbeth, but I don't recall ever seeing this particular configuration before. Then again, I'm not a big ol' fic ho like bethbethbeth. *g*

[indybrat.livejournal.com]

There are at least 2 stories that feature this trio - of course I don't remember the titles or who wrote them, but I know they're out there. One set in the consulate and the other IIRC in a cabin in the Yukon

Just an idle thought

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

Hey - just had a thought. Just for fun, try reading this as if it's Ray Vecchio doing the talking. See if the squick ratio goes up for you.

Deviously yours,
Shay

Re: Just an idle thought

[duesouthficrecs.livejournal.com]

*snickers*

I did write it to be meant as Fraser/Maggie/Kowalski, but, let me tell you, I wondered how long it would be before someone suggested it could be read as Frannie/Vecchio/Kowalski. :-)

[moxie-brown.livejournal.com]

Strangely enough, I'm not squicked either. Loved the Fraser angst, though what's in it for Maggie, besides two hot men? Hmm, maybe I've just answered my own question *g*.

Re: Just an idle thought

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

Actually, I wasn't sure the first time I read it, but when I looked at it again it sounded like Fraser's voice. Of course, I once mistook Victoria's voice for Kowalski's when reading one of these flashfics, so I suppose my reflexes are suspect. Anyway, I like it either way.