This threesome is a hard sell with me, even though I've written it a couple of times, principally because of the amount of work one has to do on characterization to get Ray and Ray together. Since they hardly know each other in canon--and since RayK and Fraser are clearly an item of some kind in canon--a writer pretty much has to make a case for the Ray/Ray relationship in every story, whereas that's not as necessary with RayK/Fraser (or even RayV/Fraser, for those who see it that way) because you can coax the suspension of disbelief out of a simple reminder of solid canonical events. Second, there's the issue of RayV's not being convincingly gay (in canon).
Well, you did your homework on this one, and you won me over with this delightful story! I suspended disbelief on RayV because he was so spot-on in every other way, especially his voice. I think this is how writers succeed at getting past big hurdles like that--if you're going to change something big about a character, you have got to make a good case for it and then make every other aspect of him ring true. I suspended disbelief on your Ray/Ray for the same reason--you gave a rationale for it, you built up your case slowly and carefully, and you controlled every other aspect of the characterizations very tightly, so I could go along with you on the premise. I'll never be a big FKV fan, and I don't even read most Ray/Ray--but most authors simply do not go to this much trouble to make it ring true. You did. And you didn't dismiss Fraser in the process (another major flaw in most Ray/Ray). I think that's a huge accomplishment.
You persuaded me to suspend disbelief and to enjoy the story thoroughly, and I think you aced the genre challenge: you just blew me away with Vecchio's amazingly romantic seduction of RayK! The threesome scene was romantic and hot as well. This story also had so many absolutely terrific lines, some of which made me laugh out loud (OMG, the whole NASA thing was just brilliant--oh, RayK! Hee!) The voices were all outstanding. In sum, this was an amazingly fun, hot, satisfying read, with an ending that fit the story just right, and no major plot holes or unanswered questions. Brava! Excellent, excellent work.
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Date: 2007-10-26 04:07 am (UTC)Well, you did your homework on this one, and you won me over with this delightful story! I suspended disbelief on RayV because he was so spot-on in every other way, especially his voice. I think this is how writers succeed at getting past big hurdles like that--if you're going to change something big about a character, you have got to make a good case for it and then make every other aspect of him ring true. I suspended disbelief on your Ray/Ray for the same reason--you gave a rationale for it, you built up your case slowly and carefully, and you controlled every other aspect of the characterizations very tightly, so I could go along with you on the premise. I'll never be a big FKV fan, and I don't even read most Ray/Ray--but most authors simply do not go to this much trouble to make it ring true. You did. And you didn't dismiss Fraser in the process (another major flaw in most Ray/Ray). I think that's a huge accomplishment.
You persuaded me to suspend disbelief and to enjoy the story thoroughly, and I think you aced the genre challenge: you just blew me away with Vecchio's amazingly romantic seduction of RayK! The threesome scene was romantic and hot as well. This story also had so many absolutely terrific lines, some of which made me laugh out loud (OMG, the whole NASA thing was just brilliant--oh, RayK! Hee!) The voices were all outstanding. In sum, this was an amazingly fun, hot, satisfying read, with an ending that fit the story just right, and no major plot holes or unanswered questions. Brava! Excellent, excellent work.