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This is so interesting. You've made tonal choices here that make the piece much less sad than it could be, but it's still so complicated. In some ways, it makes it incredibly difficult to comment on. :) It was a great read; a think-y read, as evidenced by the way we've all started spinning out various levels of meta.

You chose to end on what is ultimately a terrifically painful note. Fraser confesses his deepest, darkest secret, but Vecchio doesn't really hear him or, maybe, believe him. He acts like the consequences Fraser is talking about are trivial things, not things like loss of life. And he acts like Fraser has the power to direct them so they don't harm his family. What a lot of added pressure for Fraser and, in some ways, what a lot of added worry! Now, he's got to protect Vecchio and all of Vecchio's family, too.

So, I don't know precisely where you left them. I think that's good, because I think you offered something worth spending time with, worth mulling over. Even if you accept Fraser's powers as less than superhuman and treat this story as a sort of metaphor, it does come back to the question of: "If Fraser shows that he can always save everyone, what happens when he doesn't?"

Yeah. A very interesting, thought-provoking story and I really liked it, in all of its little details, too, from transvestite nuns, to taxidermy tools, to poor, hurt Ray.