Ow, ow, ow...I'm glad we started with the premise that this isn't Reality. And it's AU, with a different version of the Victoria story. But it was still dark and hurty as all get-out. The fallen-angel thing. The wounds from where his wings were! *cries*
And his purpose. An AMAZING explanation for the Victoria arc. Also an amazing explanation for Kowalski's sudden appearance in the storyline, his parents, and how he got his name.
This might just be the most chilling sentence in this whole dark story:
It's going to be a long time before she sees her mother.
...and it's about a character we never even meet, but...a child! Purgatory! And Fraser, oh, God, Fraser is mortal, and yet he knows this. Knows too much. *cries*
This really is an amazing piece of work. If you had written it as complete tragedy, I don't think it would be as good. But you didn't, you let part of Kowalski's job be to repair the broken relationship between Fraser and Vecchio, and that ending is so hopeful. I believe they'll get back together, they'll heal, and the rest of their mortal lives will be fine.
I even imagine Kowalski's selfless act in telling Fraser what he technically shouldn't have told him might help mitigate his sentence rather than prolong it.
I think I'll remember the image of him standing on the rooftop, remembering flight, for a long time.
Sad, sweet parting with Vecchio. So painful to know Vecchio's simply going to forget him. Ow, ow.
And the end. *cries* You killed RayK. *cries more* But I was able to read it, because we were already so far into the realm of the unreal. I refuse to live in a universe like that one. But visiting for a few minutes was absolutely fascinating, if hurty and sad.
If anyone was still tempted to find Whimsy incompatible with Angst, this story would set them straight. I think this may be the darkest piece in the whole challenge. And yet it's not unremittingly dark; there are moments of...well, if not joy, then at least peace. And a hopeful ending.
This is a brilliant piece of writing. Bravo, Whimsical Author.
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Date: 2008-09-10 08:49 pm (UTC)And his purpose. An AMAZING explanation for the Victoria arc. Also an amazing explanation for Kowalski's sudden appearance in the storyline, his parents, and how he got his name.
This might just be the most chilling sentence in this whole dark story:
It's going to be a long time before she sees her mother.
...and it's about a character we never even meet, but...a child! Purgatory! And Fraser, oh, God, Fraser is mortal, and yet he knows this. Knows too much. *cries*
This really is an amazing piece of work. If you had written it as complete tragedy, I don't think it would be as good. But you didn't, you let part of Kowalski's job be to repair the broken relationship between Fraser and Vecchio, and that ending is so hopeful. I believe they'll get back together, they'll heal, and the rest of their mortal lives will be fine.
I even imagine Kowalski's selfless act in telling Fraser what he technically shouldn't have told him might help mitigate his sentence rather than prolong it.
I think I'll remember the image of him standing on the rooftop, remembering flight, for a long time.
Sad, sweet parting with Vecchio. So painful to know Vecchio's simply going to forget him. Ow, ow.
And the end. *cries* You killed RayK. *cries more* But I was able to read it, because we were already so far into the realm of the unreal. I refuse to live in a universe like that one. But visiting for a few minutes was absolutely fascinating, if hurty and sad.
If anyone was still tempted to find Whimsy incompatible with Angst, this story would set them straight. I think this may be the darkest piece in the whole challenge. And yet it's not unremittingly dark; there are moments of...well, if not joy, then at least peace. And a hopeful ending.
This is a brilliant piece of writing. Bravo, Whimsical Author.