oh my god, this is tremendous (Though I do find it amusing that this challenge and the damn canon has us all writing straight sex ).
This: She would have been offended if anyone'd said she found dangerous men attractive, but she let Ray go all the way after the prom because he didn't talk too much and his leather jacket felt beaten and broken in under her fingertips.
...was wonderful. What a great paragraph, so much said in so few words. I love it. And this:
And when after her freshman year her advisor mentioned law school, Ray didn't laugh along with her when she told him about it. Ray dropped out of school and got a job and opened a savings account. Now he carries a gun, and she doesn't like telling her friends about it because she thinks it sounds like she's living some ridiculous adolescent fantasy
Wow. I do love that, Ray, so hard and punk on the outside, but he loves her, he really does, and he's smart, too, and he does what he thinks is right and not what everyone else thinks he should, and makes Stella start to maybe think that way as well.
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Date: 2003-06-28 09:48 pm (UTC)This:
She would have been offended if anyone'd said she found dangerous men attractive, but she let Ray go all the way after the prom because he didn't talk too much and his leather jacket felt beaten and broken in under her fingertips.
...was wonderful. What a great paragraph, so much said in so few words. I love it. And this:
And when after her freshman year her advisor mentioned law school, Ray didn't laugh along with her when she told him about it. Ray dropped out of school and got a job and opened a savings account. Now he carries a gun, and she doesn't like telling her friends about it because she thinks it sounds like she's living some ridiculous adolescent fantasy
Wow. I do love that, Ray, so hard and punk on the outside, but he loves her, he really does, and he's smart, too, and he does what he thinks is right and not what everyone else thinks he should, and makes Stella start to maybe think that way as well.
Simply lovely.