ext_3545: Jon Walker, being adorable! (Default)
[identity profile] dsudis.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] ds_flashfiction
... I think this one falls somewhere between 'unmistakably' and 'unbearably.' 227 words.



Ray sighed, and fished his keys out of the inner pocket of his parka, where they rode most of the time, next to his heart. A whole handful of metal, kept safe and warm. House keys, apartment keys, car keys, locker keys. All obsolete now; he had the key to the house and the key to the jeep on a key ring with a little plastic tab in the shape of the state of Illinois, and that stayed in his outside pocket where he could reach it easily when he needed it. The jeep and the front door didn’t mind if the keys were cold, after all.

He passed his keys to Fraser, who smiled his thanks and handed them to the toddler on his knee. The kid immediately jammed half of them in his mouth and Ray had to lean over. “You take after your dad, buddy, you know that? Everything goes right in your mouth.”

The kid just grinned at him and waved the spit-covered keys in his face, a loud jangle that drew the attention of half the other people in the auditorium. Fraser leaned over and whispered in his ear, like everybody wasn’t watching them. “And here I’d just been thinking he took after his father’s unhealthy fondness for overstuffed keychains.”

Ray grinned. “Well, Frase, six of one, half dozen of the other.”

Date: 2003-09-15 07:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ajinamoto.livejournal.com
I like schmoop. I like how Ray keeps the keys warm. Schmoop - good. :)

Date: 2003-09-15 09:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ajinamoto.livejournal.com
Yes, maiming is differently good. Depends what you're in the mood for. Killing is not happy, but sometimes necessary if your muse forces you to do it. Resist, but if you can't, make it quick and painless. :)

Kids and keys, you'd think that metal on teeth would hurt, or do they not have nerves in baby teeth?

Why are you awake?

Date: 2003-09-16 02:05 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Teething children love keys. Plus keys, while getting slobbery, don't get disgustingly messy like teething biscuits and the like.

vive le shmoop!

Date: 2003-09-15 07:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thermidor.livejournal.com
Oh! oh! wonderful shmoop! with a kid even!

This is good stuff!

Date: 2003-09-15 07:48 pm (UTC)
ext_1175: (piche)
From: [identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com
Oh, dear. I'm starting to get all melty whenever I think of them with kids. This could be scary. :)

spontaneous generation

Date: 2003-09-15 08:20 pm (UTC)
ext_12411: (Default)
From: [identity profile] theodosia.livejournal.com
... or maybe they found him under an igloo?

Re: spontaneous generation

Date: 2003-09-15 09:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ajinamoto.livejournal.com
LOL! A mini-er story!

Re: spontaneous generation

Date: 2003-09-15 09:40 pm (UTC)
ext_12411: (smiling face)
From: [identity profile] theodosia.livejournal.com
Do we give out extra points for extra flashfiction? If so here's one....

Re: spontaneous generation

Date: 2003-09-16 02:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xsmoonshine.livejournal.com
Hee! Good schmoop, for both stories. =)

Re: spontaneous generation

Date: 2003-09-16 05:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] imkalena.livejournal.com
My squeal shook up the cats! God, that was funny!

Thanks for recalibrating. ::big happy grin::

Re: spontaneous generation

Date: 2003-09-16 04:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stinkybubbles.livejournal.com
*Snort* Stewpot!

Date: 2003-09-15 09:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lmondegreen.livejournal.com
Awwwwwwww :-)
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Date: 2003-09-15 09:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] laurakaye.livejournal.com
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. Schmoop! Fine quality schmoop!

Date: 2003-09-15 09:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ozsaur.livejournal.com
Awww, very sweet! Yummy schmoop!

Date: 2003-09-15 09:58 pm (UTC)
ext_3548: (Blonds)
From: [identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com
You may actually make me overcome my strong aversion to Due South Fics With Children.

Date: 2003-09-15 10:05 pm (UTC)
ext_12460: acquired from fanpop.com (Default)
From: [identity profile] akite.livejournal.com
In just about any other fandom I run away screaming from kidfic. I could count on the fingers of one hand other kidfic stories that I acutally like. I may have to use my other hand soon because this was a good one. ::g::

Date: 2003-09-16 01:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chesamus.livejournal.com
They'd be such wonderful parents... What is it with kids and keys anyway? I liked it!

Date: 2003-09-16 08:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jack-pride.livejournal.com
I love you so *so* much. This is beyond perfect.

Date: 2003-09-16 04:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stinkybubbles.livejournal.com
Fraser/Kowalski offspring is always good. They must reproduce. More kidfics I say! Ooo, maybe it should be a challenge.

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