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366 words, just about as short as I've ever done. You'd think a movie challenge would make for cheery, fun stuff, right? Not this one. With a nod to BDtH and a certain cop buddy film I was watching the other night and thinking cynical thoughts about.




There's a movie playing Ray's head when he closes his eyes.

It loops and plays again, no matter how he tries to make it stop.

In the movie there are two guys, two good guys, who fight crime on the streets of the big city. One guy's big and handsome and smart. He wears a red uniform like he's some sort of super hero. The other guy is the comic relief. He's a skinny, blond slob. He lets the guy in red drag him into the craziest situations, but between them they always figure a way out.

It's a buddy film, so there are lots of laughs.

Ray isn't laughing.

Not while the ending of his own personal movie plays out in color and full Dolby stereo surround sound.

Red and Blondie are chasing another bad guy. He runs into a revival theater and they follow him in, right down the aisle between the seats. It's a matinee and the place is almost empty. The bad guy is backed against the screen so the colors of the film are washing over him too. He's got a gun in his hand.

Red stands up and comes right at the bad guy, telling him to put down his gun and surrender. On the screen behind the bad guy, it's night and raining. A car careens around a corner and a gun is fired from it at a guy standing in the rain, hitting him in the chest and sending him through a plate glass window in a spray of glass.

Their bad guy is going to do the same thing to Red, minus the glass window. Blondie knows it too, so he moves. He throws himself right in front of Red just as the bad guy fires. He's knocked right back into Red and they both fall down. Blondie fires too though and their bad guy falls down as well.

On the screen, the shot guy's partner in tearing his shirt open, yelling and patting his cheek, and they're both laughing because he was wearing a vest.

In Ray's movie, Blondie wasn't wearing a vest.

Then everything fades to red.

"Ray, Ray, Ray . . . RAY!"

The End.



(You'd think I'd do this sort of thing to characters I didn't like.)
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Date: 2003-09-26 02:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katallison.livejournal.com
Heh. Good point, and it makes me wonder if Vecchio left a post-it stuck to his "Fraser" file or something: "For chrissake, wear a vest when you go out with this guy, you *will* get shot at. Or blown up, or locked in a bank vault, or some damn thing. Be *careful.*"

I love the way that in both this story and [livejournal.com profile] the_star_fish's, the "movie" is a mental one, playing out on the small screen inside the brain. That seems so apropos for what we fanfic writers do, after all...

Date: 2003-09-26 01:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] invader-jim.livejournal.com
I really like this, although now I need to shake the blues. I can just see the aftermath of this in my head.

It loops and plays again, no matter how he tries to make it stop.
That's what this who scene's going to be doing in my head tonight. And this is honestly a good thing. ^_^

Date: 2003-09-26 04:34 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com
I'd comment more, but this broke my heart.

Date: 2003-09-26 10:44 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] dsudis.livejournal.com
Oh, nicely done. It hurts, but in the good way.

lie to me

Date: 2003-09-26 02:29 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] theodosia.livejournal.com
please tell me that Ray wakes up next in the hospital with everyone chuckling about what a close call they thought he was having....

'cause that's what happened, right? right?

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