Rain

Nov. 30th, 2003 10:19 pm
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[identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] ds_flashfiction
For the Water challenge:
My first drabble.
My first fic in this pairing.
Possibly the end of life as we know it.



You wish it would rain.

You remember rain: dirty, grey coldness trickling down your neck, scouring your face. Damp lake-infused air. Winter snow. Autumn/spring fog. Summer sweat. You remember.

Above all, you remember the sweet wet taste of him, refreshing you, his mouth, cool as the North, wet and clean as snow against you, trailing down your sweat-slicked body, as rain sheeted against the windows.

You rub your dry eyes. Don sunglasses against the glare. Even inside, a tall glass filled with tinkling ice cubes beside you, the desert reaches in and sucks you dry.

You wish it would rain.

Date: 2003-12-01 03:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aerye.livejournal.com
Possibly the end of life as we know it.

::g::

I love this!

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Date: 2003-12-01 03:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bethbethbeth.livejournal.com
Oh, no you don't! There will be none of that 'making me love a Fraser/Vecchio drabble" business. Not on *my* watch.

*g*

(Seriously? Fantastic!)

Date: 2003-12-01 03:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wildmachinery.livejournal.com
Beautiful. I love you for writing this.

My first fic in this pairing.

... why is everyone writing Vecchio fics lately? If I keep reading them, I may start liking him, and that would indeed be the end of life as we know it.

Date: 2003-12-01 03:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] uselessplayback.livejournal.com
... why is everyone writing Vecchio fics lately? If I keep reading them, I may start liking him, and that would indeed be the end of life as we know it.

Same here, same here. . .

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Date: 2003-12-01 03:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katallison.livejournal.com
Whoa. *Dude.* Yes.

Gorgeous, spare, so much said in so few words...god, I envy people who can write drabbles. Great job!

Date: 2003-12-01 03:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] uselessplayback.livejournal.com
I wouldn't say the end of life as we know it. . .

But I do think I need a drink of water.

This is wonderful. ^_^

Date: 2003-12-01 04:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] imkalena.livejournal.com
You are awesome. I love Ray, and I love the look at what it's like for him in Las Vegas. Without Benny, there is no life.
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Date: 2003-12-01 06:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenboo.livejournal.com
not the end of life as we know it, dear. Just a new lease on it. *g*
Interesting use of second person POV...it seems to give the narrator a separation from himself. Very appropriate for Vecchio in Vegas! Evocative images, too. Excellent work!

Date: 2003-12-01 06:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cesperanza.livejournal.com
a delighted Speranza tilts her head back and raises triumphant fists to the sky

Go you.

Date: 2003-12-01 11:40 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com
This is the thing that always gets me about RayV-Fraser: it never ends happily. Amazing work, as always!

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Date: 2003-12-01 01:33 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] beledibabe.livejournal.com
Meep.

::blink:: ::blink::

My life has ended.

No, seriously.

OMFG.

::thud::
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Date: 2003-12-01 07:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chesamus.livejournal.com
You know, until I read the word desert, I figured this was life for Vecchio *after* RayK and Fraser had sledded off into the sunset...

Like that old Judy Garland song - "you made me love you, I didn't wanna do it..."

Poetry

Date: 2003-12-01 08:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] princessgolux.livejournal.com
Wow. This is so lyrical. I love Vecchio, though I rarely buy this pairing. But you sold it beuatifully.

Thanks.

Re: Poetry

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Fraser & Ray V

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Re: Fraser & Ray V

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Re: Fraser & Ray V

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Date: 2003-12-01 09:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mergatrude.livejournal.com
Beautiful. Just a few brush strokes and we get an entire portrait.

Date: 2003-12-01 09:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kassrachel.livejournal.com
Absolutely marvelous. :-)

Date: 2003-12-02 01:33 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] akite.livejournal.com
Absolutely beautiful, Shay. I can feel it all, and I can't say that about very many F/V's.

Date: 2003-12-02 04:47 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] axiom_of_stripe
ooooh. nice!

Deidre

Date: 2003-12-04 10:48 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Loved this. Am I the only person in the universe who can see Ray V and Benny living happily ever after? I actually live in a world where Kowalski does not exist. Look deep into my eyes - Season 3 was just a bad, bad dream ......

Exactly why do people hate Vecchio so much? Is it because he comes across as more real than Kowalski? Saint Stanley of Chicago always strikes me as written to please the actor. Strange, but I actually like Callum Keith Rennie.

All BF/RK fics are the same.

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