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(so it's actually Tuesday here - it must still be Monday somewhere over there?)


Five Minutes after 'Odds'

“I’ll call in that IOU after all, Ray.”

“Hey, I said I was tapped out.”

“Nevertheless, I believe you have enough to honour your wager.”

Ray felt a thrill go through him at the assessing stare. He knew that Fraser was no taller than himself, but somehow the man loomed over him, big hands holding him still as that mouth descended towards his. A firm yet gentle suction locked them together, making his head spin. Just like buddy breathing in reverse, he thought as darkness descended.
***
Lieutenant Walsh stared bemusedly at the body of Stanley Raymond Kowalski as Mort returned with his report.

“Definitely asphyxiation, as I thought. Most strange. It’s as if something sucked every molecule of oxygen out of his body.”
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Whoa!!!

Date: 2004-01-26 10:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stormheller.livejournal.com
Started out thinking, well, this is nice, if not particularly new, then... wham! Broadsided by the fiction express!!

I sure didn't see that coming. Well done. And in so few words, too.
Thanks,
~ S.

Date: 2004-01-26 11:18 pm (UTC)
ext_3548: (Rayreads)
From: [identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com
Honest to God, I don't know whether to laugh or scream, so I'll do both.

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

Totally unexpected. Benton Fraser, oxygen vampire.

Date: 2004-01-26 11:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chesamus.livejournal.com
sorta puts a new spin on auto-erotic asphyxiation, doesn't it?

Date: 2004-01-26 11:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liaison27.livejournal.com
Lj is behaving spazzy and I was ready to log off. Almost missed this. ::snerk::
They will surely have to call in Mulder and Skully.

Date: 2004-01-26 11:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liaison27.livejournal.com
Lj is behaving spazzy and I was ready to log off. Almost missed this. ::snerk::
They will surely have to call in Mulder and Skully.

Date: 2004-01-27 12:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hellespont.livejournal.com
Well, the secret's out. The RCMP's actual mission is to seduce hapless Americans, suck them dry with with fabulous smooches, then take all that warm, moist air up north to heat the tundra. Mergatrude was just too clever for us.

Date: 2004-01-27 12:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] estrella30.livejournal.com
*snerk*

This cracked me up. Great writing and funny as hell. heeheehee! Great job!

(sorry if this posts twice. LJ was getting all wonky on me, sigh)

Date: 2004-01-27 12:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] imkalena.livejournal.com
YOU KILLED ME TOO!

I HAD TO RISE FROM THE DEAD JUST TO POST THIS!

*SNORGLE*

Date: 2004-01-27 12:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] estrella30.livejournal.com
*snerk*

This cracked me up. Great writing and funny as hell. heeheehee! Great job!

(sorry if this posts twice. LJ was getting all wonky on me, sigh)

Date: 2004-01-27 09:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] uselessplayback.livejournal.com
Hee! I just woke everyone up laughing. What a surprise!
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Date: 2005-08-25 06:27 pm (UTC)
ext_41599: MardiGras (Fraser Ray Herz)
From: [identity profile] moirin-keeline.livejournal.com
Uh.. *flabbergasted*
If Ghost!Ray comes back he will kick Fraser in the Head, ignoring with full intent that he is ascended. Daniel was showing up all the time at Jack. But Jack hadn't killed him..
Oh Ray will be royally pissed. Fraser can go and search for cover. Wondering what Robert is saying to all this. Now he has the Yank on his heels.

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