public sex challenge

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Approximately 400 words of (not quite) public-sex. Thank you to lynnmonster for wonderful beta.

*****

"Ray. Ray. Ray. Ray. *Ray*--"

Ray looked up irritably from his position on the bathroom floor. "What, you want to talk *now*?" He pulled the zipper of Fraser's jeans down quickly for emphasis.

"*Yes*," Fraser said firmly.

Ray let out an annoyed puff of air as Fraser pulled him back up to his feet.

"What? We were just getting to the good stuff." He brought his hand back to massage Fraser's hard-on through his boxers, but Fraser jerked away, zipping himself back up.

"Has it escaped your notice that we are in public?" Fraser said. His face was flushed bright red, and his entire body language looked like a mixture of really horny and really uncomfortable.

Ray leaned back against the wall behind him and rolled his eyes. "Fraser, we're practically the only people in the restaurant. Nobody's going to come in here."

Fraser cleared his throat. "It's not a matter of -- we have responsibilities, as officers of the law--"

"Oh, come on!" Ray snorted. "We're just having a little fun here, it's not hurting anybody--"

"Oh, for God's sakes, Ray," Fraser said, sounding angry, "don't you have *any* self-control?" He crossed his arms in front of his chest and glared at Ray, and Ray stared back at him.

"What the hell is your problem?"

"Perhaps we can't all be as spontaneous and free-spirited as you," Fraser said sourly. "I'm afraid you'll have to excuse me."

Fraser was halfway to the door before Ray caught up with what was going on.

"Wait--" Ray said, and he grabbed Fraser's arm, spun him around and kissed him hard. Fraser started to move his head away from Ray's, but then he seemed to change his mind and he relaxed into the kiss. After a couple seconds Ray pulled away.

"Look, I didn't mean-- Let's just go back to my place, okay?" He gave Fraser a long look, and then Fraser nodded and Ray let out his breath and grinned.

"Come on. Home, nice and private," Ray said. He turned to open the door for them to leave, but Fraser stopped him.

"Ray--" Fraser said, and then he cupped Ray's face in his hands and kissed him softly.

"Yeah," Ray said. He lifted his hand to take one of Fraser's and squeeze it, and then he let go. "Come on."

Comments

[sam80853.livejournal.com]

"Has it escaped your notice that we are in public?" Fraser said. His face was flushed bright red, and his entire body language looked like a mixture of really horny and really uncomfortable.
Yeah, I guess Fraser would feel uncomfortable having sex in a restaurant but he is so sweet when he says:"Ray--" Fraser said, and then he cupped Ray's face in his hands and kissed him softly.

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[lynnmonster.livejournal.com]

I love it when Fraser's issues and Ray's intuition come to such a happy understanding...

::mwah::

Again, I think this is *lovely*!

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

*snugs the lynn*

[ekaterinn.livejournal.com]

Awww. Different, but denfintely in character. *grins* And I wouldn't mind seeing some of that home sex either!

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Heh, thank you!

[akite.livejournal.com]

See? Vecchio and Kowalski would have been all over each other in that restaurant men's room. With Fraser, I think you captured his reaction very well. To Ray I say, "Get that man home quick!" ::g::

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[theodosia.livejournal.com]

::rattles tin cup against bars:: Sequel! Sequel!

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

*clears throat*

Sequel:

Andthentheyhadsex.

The end.

*bows*

[tobyfan.livejournal.com]

See, now this is how I think Fraser would react to public sex. Not that the hot-sex-in-public stories aren't fun because they really are. *g*

Good job.

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

They are fun! It's just, you know, when I tried to write it, Fraser just refused to go ahead and fuck. It was kind of frustrating, really.

Thank you for your comment.

[chesamus.livejournal.com]

Great take on Fraser - he probably would be embarressed as hell.

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Heh, thank you very much.

[silverakira.livejournal.com]

Lovely bit of characterization and interaction, probably more accurately portrayed than any of the other public sex pieces.

But yes, a more [cough] detailed sequel would be very nice. [grin]

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much!

[estrella30.livejournal.com]

estrella30 hearts pearl_o

That is all.

*g*

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

pearl_o hearts estrella30 times TWO.

[brooklinegirl.livejournal.com]

my lord! How the hell did I miss this? Here I go paging back thru ds_flashfic, and I stumble upon it. So glad for a hidden Pearl-o fic!

I love it. I think it's great. Because yeah, Fraser is so very much not Mr. Comfortable With His Sexuality. No way he's gonna be real easy about doing it in public. I think what I like best is the urgency, need, in the beginning - and they're *both* feeling it - but how Fraser has to, just has to, tamp it down, and NOT do this, not there and then, because it's just. Not. Him.

(even though I can write desperate-for-it-will-do-it-right-here-right-now-Fraser, I think yours is more accurate)

Along with everybody else, I think this is a stellar mental image:

His face was flushed bright red, and his entire body language looked like a mixture of really horny and really uncomfortable.

God. It's really almost woobie-Fraser, because he just can't do this, not even for Ray's sake. Not there. And I just adore when the penny drops and Ray gets that. It's lovely, and sweet, and hot, and I love it.

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Psh -- don't you know you're not allowed to miss fic like that when you're half the cause of it anyway? I only ended up writing this because of you and lynn encouraging it when I was whining in discourse the other night, you know.

Anyway, thank you very much, sweetie -- I'm so glad it worked for you.

[jenboo.livejournal.com]

LOL! I love that Fraser just can't bring himself to do it in public. No matter that there's no one around. They're in public. *g* Good for Ray that he didn't push too hard. After all, what's the good of pushing his Mountie if he can't get laid after that. :o)

And this: "Ray--" Fraser said, and then he cupped Ray's face in his hands and kissed him softly.

"Yeah," Ray said. He lifted his hand to take one of Fraser's and squeeze it, and then he let go. "Come on."

That was such an eloquent 'I love you' without actually saying the words. Very nice work!

[pearl-o.livejournal.com]

Thank you!