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500 words of Bob.

Beta, title and hand-holding by [livejournal.com profile] lynnmonster.

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One cold Tuesday, as he sat writing an official report, Bob took a call and was dispatched on his own to find a man called Ernie McGraw, who had vanished while on a weekend hunting trip. Six hours into the search, he found McGraw's body, frozen solid in his sleeping bag, one leg twisted and broken. Animals had not yet disturbed the corpse and, from the state of the camp, he surmised that Ernie had succumbed to the cold only hours before. He wrapped the body tightly in canvas to return to Mrs. McGraw, and set up his own camp for the night.

His field kit always included a pencil and a small leather-bound book, one of dozens he had bought in bulk from a store in Fort McPherson. Buck always left it to him to write up their reports, and he found his notes a useful prompt when they returned. He normally wrote down a few particulars of each day, outlining the distance they had travelled, the ruses employed by the desperate criminal they were seeking, and the amount of property damage the RCMP would have to make good. Removing his journal from the side pocket of his pack on this occasion, he observed with a grimace that when he'd snatched the little book from his desk, where he had been referring to it as he wrote his report, he had clipped on a pen rather than a pencil. He shook the pen experimentally, and scribbled a small circle on the current page. The ink was frozen.

Sighing, he slipped the pen under his shirt, against his skin, hoping that transferred body heat would melt the ice. Using the fire would only cause the ink reservoir to crack and leak. He shivered as he pressed the cold cylinder of metal against his skin. After a few minutes, the pen seemed warmer, and he brought it out of his clothes and shook it before trying to write once again. The cheap, grainy paper of his notebook absorbed the ink, and each sweep of his pen left behind a fuzzy, spreading line.

Travelled due east, following last known dir. Body of E. McG. found at 1834 hrs approx. 19.3 mi. from base. Time death: unk. est. 1600 hrs.

The ink stopped flowing. He tried to warm it again, rolling the pen back and forth between his palms. The fire crackled and popped. In the shadows, well away from the welcome heat, the canvas-wrapped bundle lay huddled next to a neat pile of Ernie McGraw's possessions. He felt a sudden sharp pang for Buck's easy, flatulent company.

Uncapping his pen again, he set the nib to paper, ready to write a short inventory of the equipment he would be returning to McGraw's widow. He hesitated, and the paper soaked up a puddle of ink, leaving a blot. He thought of Caroline and the boy, surviving another winter in Inuvik. He began to write:

A man has many thoughts on a cold night by the fire, with only a corpse for company...

Date: 2005-01-11 05:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pearl-o.livejournal.com
Oh, I like this.

Date: 2005-01-11 06:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] silverakira.livejournal.com
Oh wow, I really, really like this. You have a fantastic ability to capture the mood of the moment, and I love the details you put into this.

Wonderful story.

Date: 2005-01-11 06:12 pm (UTC)

Date: 2005-01-11 06:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ivy03.livejournal.com
That was great. I always wondered what led him to keep a journal. And I was pondering the problems of a pen in the wilderness when I wrote my fic - I think you solved them better!

Date: 2005-01-11 07:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hackthis.livejournal.com
So well done.

Date: 2005-01-11 08:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lalejandra.livejournal.com
This was so lovely. I wonder often what caused him to stop keeping a log and start journalling - and I wonder what would bring Benton to it, if he would do it at all...

Date: 2005-01-11 08:07 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] china_shop
Oh, lovely. :)

Date: 2005-01-11 08:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gurrier.livejournal.com
the amount of property damage the RCMP would have to make good

::grin::

That was lovely!

Date: 2005-01-12 01:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] laylee.livejournal.com
I really enjoyed that, the little slice of Bob's life on patrol. I love this line in particular:

He thought of Caroline and the boy, surviving another winter in Inuvik.

It's very telling of his relationship with his family, and Ben in particular. Any other father would refer to their son by name, not just as 'the boy'. You've portrayed the distance between father and son with that one line.
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Date: 2005-01-12 02:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lynnmonster.livejournal.com
Yay, you posted! It's still lovely and lonely.

Date: 2005-01-12 07:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wistful-fever.livejournal.com
Oh, the ouch. I've never really put as much thought into Bob as I should -- only how he relates to Fraser and how that changes Fraser. This story, in a really lovely way, gives him his own. Great characterization work, subtle.

Date: 2005-01-12 07:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] estrella30.livejournal.com
Oh honey - this is wonderful! Bob is such an amazing character, I think, and you've done a wonderful job here!

Date: 2005-01-13 11:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brooklinegirl.livejournal.com
REALLY well done. I like this a lot - you capture the mood so *well* - how very matter-of-fact Bob tries to keep things, always, denying any possible other emotion. I love how you get inside his head, and hte end was particularly lovely:

He hesitated, and the paper soaked up a puddle of ink, leaving a blot. He thought of Caroline and the boy, surviving another winter in Inuvik. He began to write:

A man has many thoughts on a cold night by the fire, with only a corpse for company...

Drive By Archiving

Date: 2005-01-22 11:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cesperanza.livejournal.com
I thought this was great--interesting place to set a story, I wish we had more snapshots of Bob like this. And I loved Buck's "easy, flatulent company" *g*.

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