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The fifth lie is for [livejournal.com profile] engenda because she posted Callum Hand!Porn.

1400 words, PG for boykissage



Five Lies



1. Lie of Denial: Deliberately giving false information

When Benton was nine, his grandparents moved for the fourth time since he had come to live with them. They waited until he finished the year at school, but the very next day the Jeep was packed and the trailer hitched up. Benton looked back at the town out of the rear window of the car until it was just a dark dot on the horizon.

He turned back around in his seat with a little sigh.

“Sad about leaving, son?” asked his grandfather. His faded blue eyes met Benton’s in the rear-view mirror.

He opened his mouth to answer, but his grandmother broke in briskly: “Of course he’s not, George,” she said “Why would he be sad to leave?”

Benton looked away from his grandfather’s eyes, out at the featureless landscape of the tundra. Because I almost had friends there, he thought, remembering Jason asking him if he would be at the park to play today. Because I liked going to school with other kids. He was going back to home schooling next year, he knew.

“He likes travelling with us,” his grandmother was saying, in that same no-nonsense tone. “It’s a wonderful way to grow up. Isn’t it, Benton?”

Benton looked back, meeting his grandfather’s eyes in the rear-view mirror again.

“Benton?” His grandmother turned a little in her seat to look back at him.

“Yes,” he said finally. His grandmother nodded her head at him, and turned back to face the road. In the mirror, his grandfather’s eyes were kind, and relieved.

The road stretched and curved ahead, and they rode along in silence for a time. When his grandfather raised his voice in song, a long lament, Benton sang the descant part in the chorus almost without thinking.


2. Lie of Omission: Deliberately omitting pertinent information

He loved to skate, especially when the ice was crisp beneath his skates like tonight. He and Mark circled, chasing and being chased, warming up before they picked up their hockey sticks.

“Mary Jane told me that her cousin likes you.” Mark called over to him as they skated.

“Mary Jane’s cousin?” Benton asked, confused “Is she in our class?”

Mark barked a laugh. “No, stupid. She’s in tenth grade.”

Benton frowned, came to a stop, and reversed direction. On the other side of the wide circle they were cutting in the ice, Mark did the same. “I don’t think I know Mary Jane’s cousin.”

“She’s the girl with the big…” Mark broke off, his hands moving to his chest to define breasts of improbable size. “She really likes you.”

Benton concentrated on the placement of his skates, on the tightness of his turn. “I see.”

Mark stopped suddenly, kicking up a cloud of snow. “Well? Do you like her?”

“I’m sure she’s very nice.” Benton skated to a stop by Mark.

“No, I mean, do you like her?” Mark rolled his eyes at Benton.

“I don’t know her.” Benton replied, half-exasperated, “How can I say if I like her?”

Mark rolled his eyes. “Do you like her?” he asked again, stretching out the vowel a ridiculously long time. “You must like somebody. C’mon, tell.” He reached out and grabbed Benton, tugging on his jersey, trying to put him into a headlock. They wrestled for a minute or two, Mark laughing as he repeated breathlessly, “Tell me!”

Benton pulled away finally, and kicked off, skating away from his friend. You, he thought, silently, I like you. But he said nothing out loud except, “Do you want to ask me dumb questions all night, or are we going to play hockey?”

Mark’s eyes lit up, and he raced across the ice to pick up their hockey sticks and a puck. He threw Benton’s stick over to him, grinning fiercely. “We’re going to play hockey.”

Benton smiled back, placed his hands deliberately on his hockey stick and said “Well, all right then.”


3. Lie of Exaggeration: Deliberately making something seem more important than it is

He wore his nationality like a shield. It seemed to excuse nearly every eccentricity, from talking to thin air, to conversing with his deaf wolf. His Chicago acquaintances, confronted with some evidence of his oddity, would just roll their eyes and say “Canadian”, as if that explained everything. He’d expected the worst, inured by a lifetime as an outsider, but here his differences met with nothing but a curious kind of acceptance, good-humoured and sometimes warm-hearted. By not being one of the crowd, paradoxically, he was closer to being one of the crowd than he had ever been before.

If he sometimes deliberately strengthened his accent, or feigned a little more incomprehension of local slang than he really felt, or wore his dress uniform a little more often than strictly necessary, well, only he knew that for certain.



4. Lie of Minimization: Deliberately making something seem less important than it is

When they were done, after they had revived a little, she leaned over his back, tracing the marks her long, sharp nails had left on his skin. He shivered a little at her touch.

“Do they hurt?” she asked, trailing a finger over one of the deeper scratches.

He thought back to their heated, desperate coupling, to the moment when she had dug her fingers into his skin, the sudden burst of pain that had driven him to completion. It had hurt, it hurt still, the gouges raw and sore along his shoulders and back, but the pain made it real. So he rolled over, and smiled up at her, and said, “A little. No, it’s fine.”

For a moment, her face reflected some emotion he could not identify, but she acquiesced readily enough to his kiss, and soon he was murmuring her name, over and over, into her fragrant hair. “Victoria… Victoria.”

Later, lying drugged in a hospital bed, he dreamily identified that momentary expression as disappointment.


5. Lie of Fabrication: Deliberately inventing information in order to mislead

He pulled away from the kiss when the other man made a tiny questioning sound deep in his throat. It was hard, so hard, to step away from the warm body that had been pressed to his, to untangle his fingers from the blond hair, but he did it.

Ray was still breathing quickly. “What the hell was that, Fraser?” he asked, his voice rising and cracking on the last word.

Benton looked away quickly, groping for an answer. A kiss, he thought. Love. But he couldn’t say that.

“Well, Ray,” he began, finally, his voice unexpectedly hoarse. “The Pottogoaq tribe, whose ancestral lands we are travelling over now, traditionally greet one another in that fashion. I… um… I wanted to help you become accustomed to the manner of their greeting so that you wouldn’t inadvertently cause offence if we were to encounter them.” He risked a glance over at Ray, to see how his audience was responding. Not well, if Ray’s crossed arms and raised eyebrows were to be trusted. He plunged on. “The Pottogoaq believe that a touch of lips allows the participants to share souls, and anyone refusing to… er… comply with tradition would be, I’m afraid, considered deeply suspicious. It’s actually a very interesting…”

“Fraser.” Ray broke in, his hand coming up to cover Benton’s mouth. “What are you talking about?”

Benton remained silent behind the muffling hand. Ray was grinning, his expression cocky and amused.

“You’re such a liar.” The hand over his mouth moved, the fingers moving to cup his jaw while Ray’s thumb brushed over his lips. “If you want to kiss me, you can.” The thumb rubbed over Benton’s lips again. “Do you want to?”

Benton nodded his head, and closed his eyes a moment later as warm, slightly chapped lips pressed to his. When Ray next spoke, his words were murmured against the side of Benton’s neck, “Is there really a Putta-whatsit tribe?”

Benton drew in a sharp breath of air. “No, Ray, I’m afraid they were a total fabrication.”

Ray’s chuckle buzzed against his skin. “You’re such a liar,” he said again, before raising his head to look Benton in the eye.

Benton managed to murmur only a few words more before the lips were on his again, and he forgot about lies, and truth, and anything, in fact, other than the press of hands and lips against his body. "Yes," he said, his breath teasing at the corner of Ray's mouth, “Yes, I am.”


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Date: 2005-03-09 06:48 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] shayheyred.livejournal.com
OH! This is marvelous! And so painfully right, it made me short of breath. Just wonderful.

Date: 2005-03-09 06:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] estrella30.livejournal.com
Oh wow! I really LOVE this!!

“I’m sure she’s very nice.” Benton skated to a stop by Mark.

“No, I mean, do you like her?” Mark rolled his eyes at Benton.

“I don’t know her.” Benton replied, half-exasperated, “How can I say if I like her?”


Wonderful exchange right there. I think it's hard to get a young Fraser to be young, yet still be recognizable as *Fraser*, and this works perfectly.

And god - this:

If he sometimes deliberately strengthened his accent, or feigned a little more incomprehension of local slang than he really felt, or wore his dress uniform a little more often than strictly necessary, well, only he knew that for certain.

Gah. This is just...

Yeah. Wow. Amazing.

Date: 2005-03-09 06:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pearl-o.livejournal.com
My god. I love this so very, very, very much. I think the second part might be my favorite -- young queer Fraser! -- but each of them is a perfect little piece. Fraser as a child, Fraser young and queer, Fraser as "The Canadian", Fraser and Victoria, and finally Fraser and Ray, with Ray the one who pierces through the lies -- gah, you just cover so many of the things that make me love this character, and you do it very very well.

Date: 2005-03-09 07:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] neci-ouida.livejournal.com
wow. I loved all the different chronologicaly lying Fraser. Young Fraser speaking to Mark was perfection. You rock. This was terrific! Thanks

Date: 2005-03-09 07:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lalejandra.livejournal.com
Oh, I like this. A life lived in lies.

Date: 2005-03-09 07:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hackthis.livejournal.com
This is absolutely exquisitely done, wow.

Date: 2005-03-09 07:22 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] sam80853.livejournal.com
“The Pottogoaq believe that a touch of lips allows the participants to share souls, and anyone refusing to… er… comply with tradition would be, I’m afraid, considered deeply suspicious. It’s actually a very interesting…”

Yes, Fraser! Of course! Whatever you say! ::giggles::

GREAT!

Benton managed to murmur only a few words more before the lips were on his again, and he forgot about lies, and truth, and anything, in fact, other than the press of hands and lips against his body. "Yes," he said, his breath teasing at the corner of Ray's mouth, “Yes, I am.”

Yes! Yes! Yes!


Date: 2005-03-09 07:25 pm (UTC)
reginagiraffe: Stick figure of me with long wavy hair and giraffe on shirt. (Default)
From: [personal profile] reginagiraffe
But... But... I thought a Mountie *never* lies!

*g*

This is fabulomundo. I love how Ray is the only one to call him on his bullshit.

Date: 2005-03-09 07:27 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] akite.livejournal.com
Lovely. The second one with Mark rang so true and the fourth with Victoria gave me a shiver. Yay! for boykissage.

Date: 2005-03-09 07:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lovekeller.livejournal.com
so very lovely, I love the progression of lies through the moments in his life.

Date: 2005-03-09 07:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cranberryink.livejournal.com
Oh, that was quite lovely. I have to echo the other comments when I say the piece with Mark was perfectly drawn.

And Ray! Of course Ray can tell he's lying. Of course

Date: 2005-03-09 08:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] silverakira.livejournal.com
OMG. [incoherent mumbled squees] This is all sorts of brilliant and wonderful and I adore this beyond all reason. Fucking fantastic.

Date: 2005-03-09 10:10 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] dubhartach.livejournal.com
Victoria, wow. In fact, wow to all of it. Love the different types of lie and the first part especially.

Date: 2005-03-09 11:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] serialkarma.livejournal.com
Oh, I loved this!

Date: 2005-03-10 02:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vienna-waits.livejournal.com
This was incredible. Five different kinds of lies! You deserve extra credit for that alone, but to string it out chronologically like that makes it all the more layered and powerful. The first one in particular really sucker-punched me.

Date: 2005-03-10 02:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] engenda.livejournal.com
This makes my heartache for Fraser. His loneliness and isolation is so much a part of who he is. Bless him.

Ray’s chuckle buzzed against his skin. “You’re such a liar,” he said again, before raising his head to look Benton in the eye

This is almost too private, you know? In the best possible way.

For handporn I get this? Wow. Good deal

Date: 2005-03-10 09:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] claire.livejournal.com
Quick! Post more handporn!!!!!

Date: 2005-03-10 02:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elishavah.livejournal.com
Each is so vivid. A little snapshot that encompasses that chunk of his life, the type of lie he thinks is necessary to stay in harmony with the people most important to him right then. Wonderful.

Date: 2005-03-10 03:02 am (UTC)
ext_1175: (Falling by Zira)
From: [identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com
This story about lies is so very, very true. :) Wonderful. And this:

The road stretched and curved ahead, and they rode along in silence for a time. When his grandfather raised his voice in song, a long lament, Benton sang the descant part in the chorus almost without thinking.

- just evoked young Fraser in such an amazingly perfect way.

Date: 2005-03-10 04:15 am (UTC)
sage: Still of Natasha Romanova from Iron Man 2 (rayk)
From: [personal profile] sage
This was fantastic! I would love to see you do a longer story of young Fraser/Mark, whether gen or not. You've got their voices down *so* clearly...it just seems like there's another fic hidden under there waiting to be told. Again, I really enjoyed this and the ending hit just right.

Date: 2005-03-10 09:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] claire.livejournal.com
Beautifully told. Each lie a different layer of Fraser's armour - it's almost like you were building the serge out of words.

Date: 2005-03-10 05:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brooklinegirl.livejournal.com
there are so many very vivid images in this: Fraser meeting his grandfather's eyes in the rearview mirror, Fraser and Mark chasing each other around the ice, all the lies Fraser has to force himself to tell. God, and just - yeah. His whole Chicago EXISTENCE is a lie - it's a front, a necessary one, and this:

wore his dress uniform a little more often than strictly necessary, well, only he knew that for certain.

Made me so SAD for him. And Victoria, oh god:

He thought back to their heated, desperate coupling, to the moment when she had dug her fingers into his skin, the sudden burst of pain that had driven him to completion. It had hurt, it hurt still, the gouges raw and sore along his shoulders and back, but the pain made it real. So he rolled over, and smiled up at her, and said, “A little. No, it’s fine.”

He was so fucked by her, so very, very fucked. It kills me. And the KISS here:

He pulled away from the kiss when the other man made a tiny questioning sound deep in his throat. It was hard, so hard, to step away from the warm body that had been pressed to his, to untangle his fingers from the blond hair, but he did it.

Nrrrrrgh. Just - my god. It's so HOT, and for all of Fraser's backtracking and stuttering and stories, he can't lie w/that kiss.

This was FABULOUS.

Date: 2005-03-10 07:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eightnoon.livejournal.com
This is wonderful! A nice insight into Fraser's head. I'm glad Ray could see through his lie.

Date: 2005-03-11 12:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mergatrude.livejournal.com
Wow! The pain behind each of these lies! So glad Ray is there to take the pain away.

Date: 2005-03-12 04:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gaffsie.livejournal.com
That was great! Especially:

"If he sometimes deliberately strengthened his accent (...) well, only he knew that for certain."

It really feels like you have captured Fraser's personality perfectly.
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