Request for beta

[danceswchopstck.livejournal.com]

Hi. I'm looking for beta of about 2600 words of additional time-travel F/K, now rated R or so, for the Something Gets It challenge. If you're interested in doing the beta, please comment here, and I'll set you up with access. Thanks!

Comments

hmm

[ancientsavvy.livejournal.com]

Is this part of an ongoing story? I haven't read anything of it so far if it is. But I'm willing to beta (and read to catch up if you just point me in the right direction)!

Re: hmm

[danceswchopstck.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly for offering to beta!

There are two loosely connected previous parts, the first one of which is very short. I'm not sure whether it'll be an ongoing story after this part--the bits of the story have been coming to me gradually, and I don't know how much I'll get.

I've set you up so (hopefully!) you can see part 3 (which needs the beta) here (http://www.livejournal.com/users/danceswchopstck/30779.html); the intro paragraph to part 3 has links to the two previous parts. Don't be alarmed that part 3 currently has "#2" in the post title--that's an artifact of how the story is evolving, and may not be the title of what I actually post to the comm for part #3.

I'm particularly interested in your opinions on the following:

a) Does it work, in general? Is it fun to read?
b) Are there any parts that you find unclear or think I should take out?
c) Is it too hokey or over-the-top? (I was kind of startled, myself, re where it went!)

Thanks again!