Bad Sex Challenge by Arrow (NC-17)

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

Title: Perfect
Author: arrow00
Pairing: Fraser/RayK
Rating: NC-17
Wordcount: 414
Categories: FT, PWP


Perfect

By Arrow



This is—seriously—the worst blow job Ray has ever had in his life.

For one thing, there's way too much licking going on. Sure, he'd always imagined that if Fraser ever got with the program and jumped him there would be a lot of licking involved, but not like this. Fraser's tongue is teasing the hell out of Ray's dick—not enough pressure, or too much in the wrong spots—and the worst part is, Ray knows he isn't doing it on purpose.

Ray finds himself wanting to shake him and say, Jesus, Fraser, haven't you ever gotten a blow job before? And it makes Ray want to blow him right this second to show him how it's done. Because with the constant licking and never in the right place, sometimes in the wrong place, touching his slit and almost making Ray get that gotta pee feeling, it's pretty obvious that, yeah, Fraser has never been on the receiving end. Which is the saddest fucking thing in the world, as far as Ray is concerned.

Now Fraser's got a pretty good rhythm going with his hand, but when he starts trying to suck, he's sloppy and a little dangerous with the teeth, making Ray wince. Jesus, Stella could give him a better blow job in her sleep; which, with the way their marriage was going those last couple of years, was almost Ray's reality at times.

But Fraser isn't Stella, not by a long shot. And just having Fraser blow him is a hot fucking thought all on its own. So, Ray looks down to see Fraser's mouth on him, thinking that will help push him over, because he's still riding that impossible edge that makes him want to kill someone—Ray's going to go nuts if he doesn't get off soon. And when he looks down he sees Fraser's eyes staring up at him.

Not with Stella's look. Not with the look of anyone who's ever touched him. Fraser's eyes are desperate, wanting so badly to please him, wanting Ray so hard—he's so goddamned anxious to get it right that he's getting it all wrong.

Fraser lifts his mouth for a second and says, "Ray," in this hoarse, pleading voice, and Ray looks at his swollen, red lips and stares into his concerned eyes and comes so hard he ends up whining.

Later, as he's licking all the come off the underside of Fraser's chin, when Fraser asks, "Was it...was I all right, Ray?"

Ray says, "Yeah. You're perfect."

And he means it.



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2008.12.03

ETA: er, there's now a comment sequel. Blame qe2.

A/N: I imagine later Ray gives Fraser some serious pointers while reciprocating. I am a firm believer in honesty between lovers, and full disclosure when it comes to what makes it good. But I had to take a little artistic license.

Comments

[lamentables.livejournal.com]

*g*

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

:)

[meresy.livejournal.com]

I think this is the first time awkward porn made me say "AW!"

Because, aww. Fraser.

♥

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

\o/badsex!

[zabira.livejournal.com]

what meresy said, okay?

AWWWWWWWWW, boys! *loves*

(also? HI, hi, hi! so nice to wake up to a leetle story from you.)

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

hey there, kiddo. *loves on you*

[http://users.livejournal.com/_inbetween_/]

Aw to the A/N - of course they will. But apart from being more interesting and individual, bad sex also means you're on a journey. Once you know everything and do it perfectly every time, as Fraser of course will, there's nowhere left to go! Unless you go wrong on purpose at times, which they might.

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

Once you know everything and do it perfectly every time...there's nowhere left to go!

I know! boring!

[mikes-grrl.livejournal.com]

I'm with meresy, this is the first time the description of horrible terrible blow job made me go "awwwww" and want to hug people. *checks self*

This was so very lovely and hot! I loved Ray reflecting back on Stella and how she gave much better blow jobs and much less in everything else. Nice! And yeah, I have no worries that Fraser will quickly pick up some useful tips when he gets his own "Special RayK" treatment. Heh. He is, after all, a very quick learner.

Awesome! Thank you!

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

there is nothing wrong with hugging!

tx, MG.

[nos4a2no9.livejournal.com]

This was wonderful. Just...so much love, for the whole awkward scene, for Fraser's desperation and his obvious love for Ray, and for Ray finding that sexy as hell. This bit broke my heart, a little:

Fraser's eyes staring up at him. Not with Stella's look. Not with the look of anyone who's ever touched him. Fraser's eyes are desperate, wanting so badly to please him, wanting Ray so hard—he's so goddamned anxious to get it right that he's getting it all wrong.

You! You always know exactly how to twist the knife. *smishes you* It's so great to see a new piece! I thought you were lost in Sentinel!land for a while :-)

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

\o/ Twisty Knives! my next band name.

I am not lost! I'm...resting. Beautiful plumage, you know?

[buzzylittleb.livejournal.com]

I think I love this. *pets woobie Fraser*

Uh, I think you have done bad sex much better than I could ever do.

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

no way! there are so many lovely ways for things to go wrong.

thanks, buzzy.

[grey853.livejournal.com]

God, now, *that's* love!!

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

:)

[pharis.livejournal.com]

Oh, great stuff. Fraser's so used to being super-competent -- it must be killing him to know (surely he would know) he's not giving a technically perfect performance here. But their emotional connection trumps it.

*happy sigh*

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

I think this is an arena where he's painfully aware of his inadequacies. But to paraphrase what secretlybronte put so very nicely, we love Ray even more for giving Fraser this fiction.

::sighs too::

[snarkyducky.livejournal.com]

Fraser has never been on the receiving end. Which is the saddest fucking thing in the world

and then with the Stella somno-fellatio cracking me up, and then Fraser's desperation making me sniffle...

only you could make me ride the rollercoaster in a Bad Sex Challenge fic!

also, i've never read this sentence anywhere in any story even remotely having to do with sex:
"riding that impossible edge that makes him want to kill someone"

only you, dearie, only you ;D
♥

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

somno-fellatio

har! thank you, my sweet.

[inathunderstorm.livejournal.com]

Oh, this is lovely! And very realistic, and hot, and awkward in the BEST WAY EVER. BOYS. ::squishes them::

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

\BOYS/

[equusentric.livejournal.com]

Nothing makes a heart go mushy like sloppy, awkward love. ♥

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

:)

[mergatrude.livejournal.com]

Yay! I love this. Wonderfully awkward physical reality smacked down by emotional WIN!!!

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

thank you kindly, mergatrude!

[akite.livejournal.com]

That's some of the best bad sex I've ever read. Poor Fraser! *hugs him* I'm sure he's a fast learner, though.

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

You know Ray will give him lots of chances, too. :)

[vsee.livejournal.com]

I think my heart almost exploded.

I've missed your stories lately, btw. Great to have you back. *glomp*

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

Aw, thanks, my sweet.

[brigantine.livejournal.com]

Boys! Ray is adorable, getting all overwhelmed by his own insight, by Fraser's intense earnestness. Enthusiasm can make up for an awful lot. ;)

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

oh hell, yeah. :)

[tygermama.livejournal.com]

I saw "Bad Sex Challenge" on my friends page, I saw Fraser/RayK, I saw author Arrow, so I clicked because I knew it was going to be great, and I was right!

You packed so much using so few words, I'm in awe (and giggling at Stella giving blowjobs in her sleep, and I just want to hug Fraser and say "No, dear, like this..." and a bic \o/ for Ray realizing it's the person, not the technical proficiency that really matters)

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

::yays sweet Ray::

Thank you kindly for the words.

[dessert-first.livejournal.com]

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!! <3 Oh, boys.

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

::SMISHES THEM::

[secretlybronte.livejournal.com]

I think there is such incredible kindness in this. In letting Fraser, who is tormented by the mere possibility of imperfection, believe that he got it right. And in my version of the aftermath, Ray never does tell him and Fraser just learns the way he learns everything else, assuming all the while that Ray would like anything he did. But that is, of course, my version.

Regardless, I think the reality of this makes it better. I like Ray here - even his impatience and irritation - and I love Fraser here about as much as I've ever loved him.

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

oh, man, what a lovely vision. that's exactly how it should be. plus the image squished my heart in two.

[rosemary-green.livejournal.com]

As others have said -- I don't often think "bad sex" and "sweet" in the same thought :) Liked the comparison between Stella (perfect sex but not exactly *present*) and Fraser (very imperfect but really *caring*).
And this line really struck me: Fraser's eyes are desperate, wanting so badly to please him, wanting Ray so hard—he's so goddamned anxious to get it right that he's getting it all wrong.

A great little story!

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

And Ray so deserves that caring. Thank you for the lovely note.

[qe2.livejournal.com]

nnnnnnnnrrrrgh.

*checks brain*

Nope, that's it. That's all I got.

(except: "fontA/N: I imagine later Ray gives Fraser some serious pointers while reciprocating." can be written any old time you like. now, for example. now would be just fine. yis.)

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

[gloriana.livejournal.com]

oh, very sweet :) Uncertain Fraser doesn't happen enough. The way Ray is impatient at the same time as being turned on - and then comes with the impact of realising Fraser's longing and love, rather than from the physical stimulus - was just right too.

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

That's just what I was thinking...thanks, gloriana.

[simplystars.livejournal.com]

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. &hearts And guh. And what qe2 said. :D

*hugsyoulots*

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

you got it. (http://community.livejournal.com/ds_flashfiction/653080.html?thread=15631128#t15631128)

Thanks, chica. How you been? I was just thinking about you the other day and wondering if you ever wear your shirt. :)

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

:)

[china_shop]

Awww, this is so smooshcakey! *big big hearts*

[arrow00.livejournal.com]

\cake/