Allowances

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

I'm, like, a die-hard Fraser/Kowalski person, so doesn't it just figure that my first finished Due South post would be about Stella? (180 words)



Allowances
Holden LV

Ray whispers it to Stella's collarbone, to her left breast, to her right hip. He's been saying it for weeks now, ever since the first time they ... and Stella has always been shocked, every time, and mumbled an acknowledgement or repeated the words back like an echo. Tonight, though -- and maybe it's the soft, secret smile that plays on his lips while he speaks the words, but suddenly she's possessed by an urgent, desperate need to know.

"Why?" she asks. The note of desperation in her voice is jolting, unnerving. Embarrassing. "Why do you love me?"

The question seems to catch him off guard, somewhere around her shoulder. He pauses, kisses her there. Licks his lips and appears to consider an answer.

"Because you're beautiful," he says quietly. "Because you're amazing." His lips moving against her arm send a shiver through her, deep into her belly, where his hand strokes invisible patterns across her skin. "I guess ... I guess because you let me."

She cards her fingers through his hair, and wonders what would happen if she stopped letting him.

Comments

[sighbunny.livejournal.com]

I liked it, though I don't know what 'Due South' is.

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Heh. Thanks for the comment anyway!

(I linked to this from my blog, Ces -- is that okay?)

[cesperanza.livejournal.com]

Lovely snippet--because you let me, indeed! Says a ton in a very few words! And btw, welcome to DS and to Flashfic!

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Thank you -- and thank you again :)

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much -- I'm already having fun!

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

This is sharp and compact writing, and I really enjoyed your take on the pair. Welcome -- and thanks for the gift!

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much :)

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Minimalist writing :) Thanks!

[geloe.livejournal.com]

Holden's gone straight. Sniff. Sign of the forthcoming Apocalypse!

However: still lovely. Short, but very sweet.

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Hey, I started out in schmoopy het songfic -- I'm movin' on up ;) Thank you!

[brooklinegirl.livejournal.com]

Very, very tender and lovely. Nicely done. I love it...wonderful first line, pulled me right in. Hope we see more from you (maybe once all us crazy slasher girls stop writing het! )

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. The het thing is really weird -- this challenge just seemed to beg for it, but I haven't written it in a million years. I feel kind of dirty now ;)

[rowanfairchild.livejournal.com]

Oh, I like this. In these few words, you really capture something here about the essence of their relationship. Lovely.

Glad you came to play!

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Thanks, Rowan!

[ozsaur.livejournal.com]

I can see how easy it is for Ray to love and just how hard it is for Stella. And we know how this ends. Great last line.

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Ray has always seemed a little desperate for love. Thank you for the comment!

[akite.livejournal.com]

I'm a little late for the welcome party, but I wanted to say that I liked it too. Hope to see more from you.

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much. I hope to see more from me, too -- and I really hope it won't be more het :)

[the-star-fish.livejournal.com]

I'm, like, a die-hard Fraser/Kowalski person, so doesn't it just figure that my first finished Due South post would be about Stella?

Yeah, but ... so much of what we see of Ray is about Stella -- just as so much of Fraser is about Victoria. Don't worry about het vs. slash, just go after the characterizations like this and you'll be fine. (Spoken as a die-hard slasher who suddenly found a Fraser/Victoria story in her head...)

I liked this very much, hope you'll keep posting.

[runholdenrun.livejournal.com]

Starfish,

Thank you for that. I really wasn't that worried about the het thing, since I don't think it'll turn into a habit :) And you're right -- a Ray without the Stella influence is unthinkable.

Thanks again for the comment!

[take-no-ko.livejournal.com]

That's really nice, the last line really encapsulates their relationship, in a very sad way... nicely done

[ignazwisdom.livejournal.com]

Oh my gosh -- thank you so much! (I forgot that I had linked to this one in my more recent story, and this e-mail totally surprised me!)