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ds_flashfictionHere is my first attempt at dS fic. I've only been writing for *checks watch* about two weeks, so comments and criticism are more than welcome! Big thanks to ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
jodie_mouse for the quick beta.
“Fraser, you just lick it and stick it in there. It’s not rocket science.”
Fraser frowned at the package. “Do you eat it?”
Ray leaned back on the couch. “Duh, Frase, it’s candy. What the fuck else do you do with it? You got candy up there in Canada, don’t you?”
“Well, certainly, but most of them attempt the pretense of disguising their merchandise as actual food products.” He checked the package again. “If I may say, they also have better spelling.”
“Well, Lik-M-Aid follows in the long and noble American tradition of jacking up little kids directly with metric tons of sugar. Eliminate the middleman.”
“So you take sticks of hardened sugar, dye and chemicals, you lick them, dip them into powdered sugar, dye and chemicals, and Mmph!”
Ray grinned, pulling the candy out of Fraser’s mouth. “What do you think?”
“I seem to be quite energized and sticky, Ray.”
Ray leaned in and slowly kissed him, tasting sugar and sweetness.
“Perfect.”
jodie_mouse for the quick beta.“Fraser, you just lick it and stick it in there. It’s not rocket science.”
Fraser frowned at the package. “Do you eat it?”
Ray leaned back on the couch. “Duh, Frase, it’s candy. What the fuck else do you do with it? You got candy up there in Canada, don’t you?”
“Well, certainly, but most of them attempt the pretense of disguising their merchandise as actual food products.” He checked the package again. “If I may say, they also have better spelling.”
“Well, Lik-M-Aid follows in the long and noble American tradition of jacking up little kids directly with metric tons of sugar. Eliminate the middleman.”
“So you take sticks of hardened sugar, dye and chemicals, you lick them, dip them into powdered sugar, dye and chemicals, and Mmph!”
Ray grinned, pulling the candy out of Fraser’s mouth. “What do you think?”
“I seem to be quite energized and sticky, Ray.”
Ray leaned in and slowly kissed him, tasting sugar and sweetness.
“Perfect.”
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Date: 2003-07-25 03:37 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2003-07-25 03:38 pm (UTC)Sounds just like him! Congrats from another newbie. I promise you they're very welcoming here!
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Date: 2003-07-26 11:45 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2003-07-26 12:34 pm (UTC)"We are Due South - prepare to be assimilated. Thank you kindly."
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Date: 2003-07-25 03:41 pm (UTC)“I seem to be quite energized and sticky, Ray.”
Very sweet! Great job with voices.
Ahh for the days of Pixie Stix and Lik-m-Aid. Nothing like sending us careening off the steel and concrete objects in the playground!
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Date: 2003-07-26 11:46 am (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2003-07-25 04:18 pm (UTC)“Well, certainly, but most of them attempt the pretense of disguising their merchandise as actual food products.” He checked the package again. “If I may say, they also have better spelling.”
I could hear his voice as I read it. Nicely done! And welcome!
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Date: 2003-07-26 11:47 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2003-07-25 04:38 pm (UTC)Stellamaris who grew up in Quebec
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Date: 2003-07-26 11:51 am (UTC)They do indeed. I googled it to be sure of the spelling. I have to tell you, I'm never going to search for anything with any form of "lick" in it, ever again. Oi.
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Date: 2003-07-25 05:58 pm (UTC)Oh, shyeah. Like we believe *that*. You're really a ringer with ten years of slashy experience under your (pirate) belt!
*g* Wonderful job--I only aspire to convey such a great little slice of character and sweetness in so few words. Welcome to the asy--ah, fold!
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Date: 2003-07-26 01:32 pm (UTC):D
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Date: 2003-07-29 12:07 pm (UTC)liarresource for all our newcomers.Oh, and the story? Adorable!
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Date: 2003-07-26 11:52 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2003-07-26 12:31 pm (UTC)*holding shiny object in front of eyes and twirling* You...will...write...many...more...fanfics....you...will...
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Date: 2003-07-25 07:14 pm (UTC)Some excellent Ray-voice and Fraser-voice here.
Lovely job. I can't wait to see what you do next!
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